anyone want to take a look at my essay?

Applying to College
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<p>need someone to take a look before i submit...</p>

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<p>i will take a look send me PM.</p>

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<p>ill have a look</p>

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<p>very well written essay. what schools will you be applying to.</p>

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<p>I will take a look</p>

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<p>me too. i'll be happy to look at it</p>

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<p>I'll look at your essay</p>

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<p>ill look too if you want</p>

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<p>Thanks for the help guys... I'm applying to:</p>

<p>UPenn
Haverford
Lafayette
Bucknell
Villanova
Penn State
St. Joseph's U</p>

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<p>The essay is very well wrtten. The only advice I can give you is to take the descriptive words out. That's just my opinion I think it's good that you used quotes too. Well goodluck with your admissions. It's look like you have prepared your essay well. Goodluck.</p>

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<p>Ill take a look. PM me</p>

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<p>Getting mixed responses... anyone else want to take a look? Is it too impersonal?</p>

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<p>i'll take a look at it, PM me...</p>