Anyone willing to read/critique my transfer essay?

<p>I just finished my first draft last night and wanted other people to read it to see if I'm on the right track. I would greatly appreciate it. Thanks</p>

<p>I’ll critique it for you.</p>

<p>ya if you send me yours can i send mine?</p>

<p>I’ll check it out. I helped my younger cousin write his essays for all the ivies as a hs senior (3 ivies interviewed him recently).</p>

<p>sure, i’ll take a hit. where are you applying?</p>

<p>University of Maryland: College Park</p>