Bizarre Essay! Good or Bad?

<p>Ok guys...</p>

<p>My best friend just applied to Yale and sent me her 500 word supplement essay. She wants to know if it was to outlandish for Yale, or if it was unique and will set her apart from other candidates. I can vouch for her to, we both go to the same school, everything IS completely true!</p>

<p>My life can best be defined by Murphy's Law: "Anything that can go wrong, will go wrong." Maybe it's bad karma from all the mischief I perpetrated as a child, or perhaps I was cursed by gypsies in a past life, but my luck is unusually unfortunate. The only way to relay just how strange and jinxed my world is would be to chronicle each and every peculiar incident, and so I present a condensed excerpt of the bizarre life of Felicia Sackowski.</p>

<p>Johnny Depp gazes into my eyes, the glow of the sun behind him. He whispers to me, "Felicia… Felicia… Felicia! Get up for school!" Why didn't I hear my three 6 a.m. alarms? My clock, my phone, my iPod? Not one went off.
"Felicia," says my mother, "you'd better hurry up, it's already 7:50." By 8:10, I've gone through the morning rituals. Now, where are my shoes? "Hi, weesha…" I look up to see my grinning one-year-old brother, who has learned to walk and, evidently, learned to steal. After scouring the playpen and the toy chest to no avail, I settle for tennis sneakers and accept in advance the consequential dress code violation.</p>

<p>Walking briskly, I spot a panting, ominous raccoon ahead of me on the road. I begin to realize nervously that raccoons don't normally appear in the day, and they certainly don't normally foam at the mouth. Galvanized by images of being devoured by the growling, rabid creature, I run the seven blocks remaining to school- just in time for the closing, "Have a Magnificent Monday!," of the morning prayer, marking the beginning of first period.</p>

<p>Following a pop quiz in A.P. Government and Politics and receiving, as a result of my thirty second tardiness, a detention, I stop at the nurse's office for a cup of tea to cure my caffeine migraine. In walks a petite blonde woman to take five medications (all for mental afflictions.) At the sound of my voice, she whirls around, and I recognize the face: It's Jennifer, the head of the guidance department and the person handling my college affairs. I drop by her office during my lunch hour to hand in my transcript requests. The secretary, Mrs. Hannigan, affectionately deemed Clucky the Canasta Mastah, is on the phone for twenty minutes before acknowledging my presence: "Oh, dahling, ya so FUNNY! Did ya tell 'em about ya manicurist? Uh-huh. Okay, I gotta run, I gotta student here waitin', see ya at canasta!"</p>

<p>After school, my psychotic "best friend," Connor, grabs me by the arm and ushers me to the art office. His mother, the drama teacher, has smuggled in a zealous Nigerian priest named Joel. Connor promptly locks the door, and announces that Joel has rid him of the "little people in his head." "Feleesha," shouts Joel, "you need to be DELIV-AHD!" With Joel's hand planted on my head, I inwardly chant the Murphy philosophy: "Smile . . . tomorrow will be worse."</p>

<p>The essay's creative and all and interesting...</p>

<p>But I mean, what exactly is this essay telling Yale about her-it's really nothing but her bad luck... I can see the secretary's personality actually clearer.</p>

<p>I don't know... maybe I just need to know the prompt?</p>

<p>The essay was to tell them something that they don't already know. So something about grades or extracurricular activities wouldn't be good because it is in her app already. So, she did bad luck.</p>

<p>Agreed with pineapplelollie - It’s interesting, but it says nothing about her personality. There are details about everyone else except for her-- What were her emotions? Reactions? It really doesn’t show any quality that a college admissions officer would want in a student.</p>

<p>Agreed. It’s interesting but the point of the essay is kind of vague. I understand that your friend is writing about her bad luck, but she should probably shy away from just listing the events. Why are they significant? Why even write about them? I think there’s potential hidden somewhere in that essay.</p>

<p>The idea behind this is incredibly novel. So novel that, if the Common App essay this person has written fulfills the requirements of detailing the applicants personality, that this supplement functions wonderfully. I personally would want to see the Common App essay though before making a sure decision.</p>

<p>When this starts out, I thought the ‘bad luck’ would be a bit more interesting. Instead, the essay loses steam and becomes rather silly. I vote no.</p>

<p>I don’t know dsus444, it kind of just seems like a list of events to me without any real “depth.” I agree that the idea behind this is great and it could definitely work if written in a different fashion. Anyways, like I said earlier, try putting some purpose behind this essay that shows WHY you would be a good fit for Yale. Maybe you could take the essay a step further and say that despite your bad luck, you still persevere… idk, that’s just an idea. </p>

<p>I also agree with Oilpond, the essay starts out interesting but it slowly becomes silly. You have to be careful, you don’t want the admissions officers to think you don’t take the school seriously enough to write a well thought out essay. Anyways, it’s just my opinion and I’m no admissions officer.</p>

<p>You realize the essay was posted almost three years ago?</p>

<p>I was going to say that.</p>

<p>Wow… I just realized that. Someone brought it back from the dead and I kept responding… Anyways…</p>