Can anyone critique my Vanderbilt EC supplement?

<p>"Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences. (150-400 words)"
Respond below, and I'll PM it to you.</p>

<p>I’d read it.</p>

<p>Pancaked, don’t ever graduate from Vanderbilt and leave this forum! you are the best. You are unfailingly generous and constructive and informative. </p>

<p>I can! (I’ve already applied to Vanderbilt this year but if you don’t want someone currently applying to colleges to read it I understand)</p>

<p>Parent here. I will read it, if you like. </p>

<p>I can read it; I just recently got accepted to Vandy. </p>