Can anyone glance over one of my supplement essays?

[robotFOOD]

<p>I just want to know if I'm on the right track with this essay, for I am unexperienced with such questions :O</p>

[TemplarOfSteel]

<p>sure pm it to me</p>

[crazy4ivy]

<p>yes pm me & i'm free</p>

[tempest_in_a_teacup]

<p>pm me, id love to</p>

[MetallicManiac]

<p>sure, pm me too</p>