Can someone please give feedback on UC essays?

College Essays
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<p>I need someone other than a friend to read my UC personal statements. Friends are good for cutting out words and grammar, but they aren't always as critical as they need to be for other things. </p>

<p>SO, PM me if you are willing to read through my essays and give me some tips. I'm going a bit out on a limb with my second one, so I'd really like feedback.</p>

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<p>I’m too lazy to PM you but you can PM me.</p>

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<p>Yeah, you can PM me if you like. And don’t worry-- I’m critical, ha.</p>