Can someone please proof read my Graphic Design MFA statement of purpose

I’m applying to Yale’s MFA in graphic design and would like someone to proof read it. I don’t want to post it publicly so if you are willing please post and I will send it to you. I’m also over the word count so if you see anything I can remove,that owuld be helpful. Thank you!

The instructions:
“A one-page statement that addresses influences, interests, current work direction, brief life history (as it relates to art/design practice), and reasons for applying to graduate school at this time. Statements should be limited to one page or no more than 500 words.”

Sure. PM it to me & I will try to help.

Okay thanks. I’m just trying to figure out why I can’t send you a PM.
Edit: Never mind, it’s fixed now. I just sent it. Thank you!