Can someone read my supplemental essay?

College Essays
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<p>Question:
Please submit a one-page, single-spaced essay that explains why you have chosen your major, department or program. This essay should include the reasons why you’ve chosen the major, any goals or
relevant work plans and any other information you would like us to know. If you are applying to more than one college or program, please mention each college or program you are applying to. Because our
admission committees review applicants by college and programs, your essay can impact our final decision. Please do not exceed one page for this essay.</p>

<p>It seems a bit iffy at sections and I'm not sure how to fix it. Plus, it's a bit short and I can't think of anything else, I wanted to try to completely fill up the page.</p>

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<p>I'll give it a read. PM Me.</p>

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<p>sure pm me, I'll give it a read</p>

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<p>i'll read as well</p>

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<p>sure pm me</p>

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<p>sure ill take a look. Ill try and edit it as well if I feel you should edit something :)
PM me the essay :)</p>