Can someone with experience read over my letter of continued interest to a school I was deferred at?

Applying to College
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I would like some advice on how I can make a more compelling case to a school I was deferred at

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I am willing.

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Can I please have some more readers? I would like some adult opinions as well

4

Go ahead and pm me if you want.

I’m willing to read and give advice as appropriate.

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I would love to read it and critique it!

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I’ll see it.