<p>Letters and words and sentences and stories. Papers and pens and ideas. Writers and subjects. Journalism. It's my passion.
I became involved with my school newspaper last year. As a writer, I learned how to put my thoughts into words and my words into stories. I trusted my instincts and got the job done. For the first time in my life, I saw the world with clear eyes; I felt as if I was finally doing something worthwhile.
I was timid before journalism, but through it, I became fearless. I contacted participants of the Egyptian Revolution. I catechized my town's council members. I talked to people nobody else would approach. I'd found my calling.
This year, I was promoted to news editor. I love it. I get to instruct the next generation of journalists; I get to share my passion with these kids. They teach me something new each and every day. I'm learning how to adapt and overcome, and how to lead by example. I'm determined to change the world with my words - one story at a time.</p>
<p>i like it.</p>
<p>Don’t use semicolons unless you absolutely need to lol</p>
<p>Okay, when I posted it elsewhere, someone told me it was extremely uninteresting, cliche, and artificial. Was this just some random angry ■■■■■ on the Internet, or are there aspects of this essay that need major revisions?
P.S. Why no semicolons?</p>
<p>i’m in no means an expert on this, but my biggest piece of advice: show, don’t tell, that journalism is your passion.</p>
<p>Just an idea…make “I was timid before journalism, but through it, I became fearless.” the first line (it’s a good hook) and then from there make the theme of the piece how journalism has helped you to become a more outgoing and courageous person, i.e. how shy you were at the first meeting but now you confidently work the room as head, how the responsibility of being head has encouraged you to leave your comfort zone and talk to people that other people were scared to</p>
<p>also, show don’t tell that “I’d found my calling”</p>
<p>hope i helped!</p>
<p>^*in no way an expert. whoops!</p>