Can you review my statement?

<p>Any advice on this statment will be appreciated.
Thanks!!!</p>

<p>STATEMENT OF PURPOSE</p>

<p>I would like to pursue PhD studies in philosophy at the ****University because this school is strong in all my main research interests, which are the following: </p>

<p>1} Philosophy of mind: I am especially interested in the philosophical assessment of the experimental approaches to consciousness and its bearings on the mind-body problem </p>

<p>2) Philosophy of language: More specifically, I would like to explore the Wittgensteinian remarks on following a rule. As a secondary concern, I would study the approach the use of logical connectives in everyday language. </p>

<p>3) Ethics: possibility of application of Kantian ethics in the analysis of contemporary moral issues, especially in bioethical dilemmas. </p>

<p>4) Decision theory: I would try to make explicit what is the role that self-deception may have in the main theories of decision. </p>

<p>5) Philosophy of law: I intend to draw the deeper implications of Rawlsian theory of justice to legal reasoning.</p>

<pre><code>I do declare, however, that I am completely open to other topics and prepared to change my interest and priorities according to my progress in the graduate courses and research. So, I can say that I am interested in most subjects of what can be considered analytical philosophy. From a more historical perspective, I would mention Ancient Greeks and Descartes and Peirce as other authors I am most interested in.
My interests in philosophy of mind and decision theory grew up along the writing of my MA thesis, which was on the mind-body problem in Freud. On its turn, my concern with ethics, philosophy of law and philosophy of language were strengthened along my four-year experience as a college teacher of informal logics, political philosophy and business ethics.
By taking a look on my background and my age, one may ask why I have taken so long to finish my MA studies and, then, to apply for the PhD. Only to address these gaps I must mention a serious intestine disease I had for roughly 8 years. This medical disorder (medically held as mysterious and insoluble until two months before it was completely extirpated in January 2005) involved many occasional intestinal bleeding episodes, which forced me to get hospitalized for more than twenty times between 2000 and 2004.
This predicament however did not stop me from giving classes, keeping reading philosophy and studying philosophically relevant languages - like German and Ancient Greek, both of which I had started at the undergraduate level. And, most of all, it did not prevent me from seriously willing to become a professional philosopher.
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<p>I think you have a little too much information about the medical disorder.</p>

<p>Than you, GuitarShredder05, for the remark. I have the seme impression. I would like to say something less about my disease. But I do not know what to delete or change. I have tried to rephrase it in many ways, but it always seem too short to be convincing... I do not mean to use the disease as an excuse for my delays, but, at least, as a credible justification...</p>

<p>Maybe this?
"By taking a look on my background and my age, one may ask why I have taken so long to finish my MA studies and, then, to apply for the PhD. Only to address these gaps I must mention a serious intestine bleeding disease I had for roughly 8 years. This medical disorder was completely extirpated in 2005, after having forced me to get hospitalized for more than twenty times between 2000 and 2004."</p>

<p>Isn´t it too brief?</p>

<p>No, it's not too brief. I would even just say "serious medical condition" instead of "serious intestine bleeding disease". You don't want your essay to be about intentinal bleeding, after all...</p>

<p>Wow!!! I will do what you are suggesting.... The statement is expected to be very short. So, if I keep saying details on my disease, I will take all the attention to it.
Thank you!!</p>

<p>Is this what a SOP looks like for all graduate schools? I'm more used to the BS style college app essay for UG. (Keep in mind I'm looking @ engineering/sciency grad school)</p>

<p>scorp, I actually do not know what a grad application essay should look like. This is why I need help...</p>

<p>Search the grad school forum for 'Personal Statement.' There's been a few others that people have asked others to read. That should give you some idea of what it should look like.</p>

<p>Thank you all!
Any other comment?</p>