common app essay topic

<p>for the common app essay question about something that is essential to who you are, i am wondering if this is a good idea.</p>

<p>"Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story."</p>

<p>when i was in first grade my parents got divorced, it was very hard for me to adapt to living in two houses. my mom began to have a drinking problem around when they got divorced but i was never really aware of what it was, mostly all i remember seeing up until i was older was her drinking a lot out of a bottle in a brown bag. once i was in about fifth grade i was alot more aware on what my mom was dealing with, but i didnt want to admit it, not just to myself but to others. regardless of my moms troubles she was my role model, and i would always go to her for advice and protect her. so when my father was attempting to show me my moms addiction i didnt want to believe it so i told him he was wrong and there was nothing wrong with her, but she never hit me, the effects of her addiction were mostly she would sometimes fall asleep during the middle of the day and stay asleep, but in my mind i just thought she was tired, but she never had any energy. as a kid i understood her troubles but the one fear i had was that her addiction would take her life, and i told her that i was scared about that but she told me not to be scared and that she will always be there. after years of living with both my mom and my dad, my mom got into a car crash, no one was hurt but she got a DUI so as a result she had to go to rehab for a while and try to get better. after a few months of her being gone i wasnt allowed to be driven by her and also not allowed to be alone with her without someone else there. so durrng this time i stayed some weekends at my grandparents house with my mom just so i could get some time with her. eventually i was able to be alone with her and be driven by her by the time i entered highschool. over christmas break durring sophomore year my mom was put in the hospital because she was extremely sick, but i was told that they can cure this and its not a big deal, but when in fact it was. she was in the hospital all of break and all of january. when i was told that all of these problems were caused by her liver it hit me that all of her drinking in the past really took a toll on her, and it made her very sick and weak. she was so weak she couldnt get a liver transplant because she wasnt strong enough for it. so after the doctors tried everything there was one last thing they could do. it was a surgery to make her liver and her body strong enough to be able to survive an eventual transplant, but that would be a long way down the road. with no other options left they did the procedure, but it was revealed that my mom was so weak she couldnt survive the procedure, and she never woke up from the procedure. so now midterms are coming up and my mom passed away, i took them and i got mostly c's and d's and maybe one b. because my mom passing was the biggest thing on my mind. for the rest of the year my grades suffered, i just had no effort i had no push to do good, with my mom gone. im an okay student my freshman year gpa was about a 2.87, but my sophmore gpa was a 2.45, my grades took a huge plummet after my mom died. but at the end of junior year i pulled out with a 3.02 gpa.</p>

<p>please give me your input, should i use this for my essay topic.</p>

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<p>My condolences on your loss.
This essay needs a lot of work. A LOT. But it could be powerful. It just seems like a long description of all the adversity you faced, and not at all about yourself. It’s almost like an excuse for your poor performance at school. I’m in the process of applying as well, and I’ve learned that colleges want to see how you overcome the tough times, not a long description of how tough you’ve had it. This essay is too all over the place. If anything, this should be your essay describing anything not mentioned in your app, not your common app essay (which should show creativity and above all, who YOU are). </p>