<p>I already think my essay's treading the fine line between good and cliche, and I'm having a hard time describing the "influence" on my life today (it's about my Girls State experience). In other words, how do you say the impact on your life without "telling" and sounding like "and now I'm a stronger person and truly found myself though this experience" etc.?</p>
<p>Also, is the essay supposed to be single or double spaced?</p>
<p>Gracias! :)</p>
<p>Bumpity. Anyone want to read/answer? :)</p>
<p>…Anyone? 10char</p>
<p>…Please? I’m a little lost here…</p>
<p>Hmm. That’s a tricky question because I’m not really a master of the whole “showing, not telling” thing either, but I just think you should try to “show” a specific example of how you’re a stronger person, like something you didn’t do earlier that you do now, and make it sound as dramatic/unclich</p>
<p>Show your experience at Girl State through ‘a story’ type essay. Through this the Adcom’s will see all that you have gained by that experience. Again, it is about showing the reader and drawing them in to your life. Start with a really great ‘hook’ for your first sentence. You do that by putting the reader in the moment. Make sure you intertwine yourself throughout your essay. Students find this difficult, but it really is just tell a story about yourself. Make it a great read. If you think it sounds cliche then start over or rework it. Many adcom’s want to read something new and fresh that really makes this applicant stand out. Remember it does not have to be the obvious, I went to Girls State and this is who I be became. What made your time there important to you. Tell it as if you are there or just came back and telling your BF what it was like and why you loved it so much. Or maybe you had one occurrence there that really changed your life or perspective. We call this the defining moment essay. And it should be single spaced. The most is space and a half. Hope this helps!</p>
<p>I think I get what you mean, sqdwfe13… I rewrote the end paragraph and I think it’s a little better! :)</p>
<p>Haha, actually my main essay is a “story.” I start it with some of the fun campaign slogans and go into the “whistle stop” campaigns where I was running for office. It’s kind of about how I got the confidence to put myself out there and take a risk, and it paid off. I relate it back to looking forward to the new college experience and how that’s going to be a risk that will pay off. Cliche-ish, but I still kind of like it.</p>
<p>Thanks! You did help… I went ahead and 1.5 spaced it. Thank you! :)</p>