@NotReallyThere @Ali059 @sakurakimino630 @desilesbian
I am proofreading essays for applicants. You can see my offer in this thread, but I suppose it’s buried somewhat now by later posts.
My offer is still open. PM your essays to me–no rough drafts, but what you consider your most finished version after careful review.
Many happy customers (free) since I started during this year’s ED deadline.
Good luck!
@IvyGrad09 Can I pm you my essay too? I’m applying for an art school fyi
My son, who is not on CC, asked me to find someone who doesn’t know him to give feedback for his common app essay. Is anyone available? It isn’t in final form. He would like to know what sort of impression of him it conveys and whether the content is substantial enough.
Thank you.
heres my essay lmk what you think
Happiness has been something I have struggled to find at times in my life, perhaps because it is something so complex and challenging to define. It means different things to different people. It is what makes us unique, the beauty of being human.
Throughout high school, my challenge in obtaining happiness has been determining its authenticity. Many times, I truly believed something would make me happy, only to be broken and disappointed after the fact. What I thought was best for me and would make me happy was not necessarily the case. I have always been confident in my ability to strive for success and have a sense of accomplishment. As a perfectionist, I challenged myself to be the best version of myself possible. I worked diligently in school, practiced hard in the pool, and did all I could to help those in need.
I soon became overwhelmed with the amount of stress I inflicted upon myself and became obsessed with an unrealistic idea of perfection. No matter how much I did or tried to accomplish, whether in school or otherwise, I felt that I was no longer good enough for myself. The only thing that made me feel a sense of worth was losing weight. My healthy sense of determination quickly became extremely unhealthy. Fixated on the food I consumed, the exercise I performed, and a number on a scale, I lost sight of who I truly was. I fell into an unhealthy, anxiety driven cycle, where I relied on starving myself to fill the void of my believed shortcomings. This entire time I put on a smile for others so that they would be unaware of my struggles. Although I was overwhelmed, I did not show it. To everyone else, I seemed content and happy—my usual self. I may have been smiling, but that smile easily hid what I was truly feeling.
Identifying and understanding that my habits were a problem was the first step to my recovery. It was not until I was confronted by friends after dive practice one night that I realized my eating disorder was in fact an issue. I have always been one who does not like to burden others with my problems and would rather solve them myself. The more my friends persisted, though, I realized getting help from others would not make me any less independent or strong, but rather, would show I value the concern of others. Had it not been for my teammates and friends, I would not have made the progress I have today. With their support, in addition to seeing a psychiatrist, I have come to realize that perfection is unobtainable. Although I still have progress to make, my struggle with anxiety and an eating disorder has taught me to find the things that genuinely make me happy. I have channeled my energy into more positive, healthy activities—those that bring me profound happiness. Cycling, a newfound passion for music, and independent travel have provided healthy outlets for the daily stresses of life.
The most important thing I have taken away from this experience is that everyone deserves to be happy. Helping others find happiness is what I believe I have been called to do. In my future career, I want to make a difference in people’s lives and help everyone realize they are deserving and capable of feeling happy and contributing to the world. A smile should denote someone is happy, nothing else. Appearances can be vastly different than what the reality of a situation may be. No one is too small or insignificant to make a difference. Happiness, to me, is the meaning of life.
Hello,
Is anyone willing to read my Why NYU Stern essay? NYU is my dream college and I didnt havve a chance to ED, but I’m ED2ing and would like to have a good essay.
my only critique is the transition from second to third paragraph…i can’t understand how someone as self aware/reflective lost sight on the bigger picture. did something happen - like did you gain weight and this affected your diving performance, which caused your anxiety of failure?
other than that, you’re a really talented thinker and writer : ) plus you’ve learned so much about how to find happiness in life, I think you’re on the right track and hope it continues for you.
best on your application
Hello,
Is anyone willing to read my Why NYU Stern essay? NYU is my dream college and I didnt havve a chance to ED, but I’m ED2ing and would like to have a good essay.
Hi,
I am an international student and I would really appreciate some feedback on my essay (mainly grammar- and language-wise but other comments are great too). Please PM me if you are currently in college or graduated.
Thank you in advance.
Is anyone still proofreading and giving opinions on essays at this point?
I need someone to review my essay, hit me up if you can, I’d appreciate it 
Hey guys, its actually my first post on here and I really need some last minute essay feedback:) Im an international student so I would appreciate some advise from you us uni students ou there. Please hit me up if you just want to give a brief feedback:)
Hi, if anyone is willing to review my “Why Us” essays and/or a supplement (just need quick last-minute tips), please PM me! Thank you so much (:
I am still reading essays. (Dozens of happy customers, only one crank, so far.)
Please PM it here after you have carefully re-read and edited your essay many times. Pretend I am an admissions reader and make it your best work.
For your own sake, if your essay is for an application to a writing program of some kind, it has to be well-written, and grammatically correct, at the very least.
Interesting would be good too.
Science and finance applicant-essays have been surprisingly good! Keep it up.
@ChubbyPanda @kodreaming @brytonsf @Kat1998xD
And anyone else…
I’m willing to read and give feedback as well. I am an ivy grad and have two students who attended select boarding schools and colleges in the top 10. I don’t have a horse in the race. My two have matriculated, so PM me if you want feedback. Main tips: show don’t tell and …be interesting.
@IvyGrad09 Hi there. I’m unable to PM you but would love for you to read my essay
@preppedparent Hi there. I would love for you to read my essay but am unable to PM you.
@Ballestlavie Try to figure out a way to PM message me. I only work that way.
All other applicants: In assessing the quality of opinions on CC, check out the ratio of endorsements (Helps and Likes) to number of posts. Is a member simply more opinionated than they are genuinely useful to others?
This is the mother of camcam2022. More than happy to review essays now that helping local applicants has slowed down. My background is as a former Recruiting Director so editing both resumes and essays is a solid strength. Inbox if help is needed. Include the question and essay content. Please grammar and spell check prior to submission.
hiii, if anyone would be willing to read my common app essay, that would be fantastic! :’) (late, i know, i know.)
I’ve finished all my college apps, so if any of you would still like help, I’d be happy to help.