Could someone look over my "why should I be awarded x scholarship" essay?

College Essays
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<p>I will be submitting this soon. If anyone could look at it/critique it, please let me know. Please and thank you!</p>

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<p>Sure.
Send it to me in a pm.</p>

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<p>I’ll look it over as well. PM me.</p>

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<p>I will PM me :)</p>

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<p>Sure, pm me.</p>

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