<p>I have a few sentences in my college essay that I can't seem to work around. Any ideas for any of them would be great!</p>
<p>1) "There was espicailly one woman of whom I became fond of."
Correct usage of whom? Use the word "of" twice? End sentence with "of"?</p>
<p>2)[A sentence that says why I continued] "I also continued because I knew my time would be making a difference for....
Is the position of "also" correct? Or should it go after "continued"?</p>
<p>3) "I was worried that I wouldn't be able to support or communicate with the patients."
I think it's called parallelism and I don't think it works with the bolded words. How could I change it?</p>
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<li><p>“especially” not “espicailly” And college essays are a little liberal with grammar. So ending in of is fine. “There was especially one woman whom I became fond of.” Left out the first ‘of’; I didn’t think it was necessary. </p></li>
<li><p>It’s correct as it is.</p></li>
<li><p>It’s fine.</p></li>
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<p>1) “There was espicailly one woman of whom I became fond of.”
Some people are sticklers for the whole preposition at the end of a sentence thing. I suggest you leave it out. One Woman OF whom I became fond OF. You really should reword, and the second OFis unnecessary. Either “one woman i have become fond of” or “one woman of whom I became fond of”</p>
<p>2)[A sentence that says why I continued] “I also continued because I knew my time would be making a difference for…
Is the position of “also” correct? Or should it go after “continued”?
Did your last sentence start with “I continued because blah blah?” Don’t use this sentence if so- find a newer way to open it up.
" I knew my time would be making a difference for” <- awkward sounding. I knew I would be spending my time making a difference for…? Depends on the context</p>
<p>3) “I was worried that I wouldn’t be able to support or communicate with the patients.”
TO support or communicate WITH
It sounds awkward because the WITH goes with the COMMUNICATE and not the SUPPORT. Maybe “to communicate with or support”</p>
<p>Grammatically, these are ok. But just in general, they really need some work because they sound kinda awkward and don’t really flow at all.</p>