I’m new here, so I’ve never actually posted anything; I’ve lurked here many times though. My SAT score is 1550, I have a pretty decent GPA and I’m top ten for my class of 300+. For my Common App essay, I have a couple of essays in mind all answering the question “Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others”. While my dream school is Cornell, realistically I’m looking to get into Tulane or another school that offers good merit scholarships. I have two essays written that haven’t been seen by anyone but me and I need a second opinion if possible.
1.) Cycling essay-- talking about how I got into cycling and how it is thrilling etc, my first road bike I bought with my own money, the group of people I ride with who are 4-5 times my age
2.) Still a biking essay, but talking how I made a lighting system for my bike to be able to be seen by others at night in my free time, using an inverter and a 12V battery.
Would anyone who has already finished high school be willing to read one of my essays for me to see what I could possibly change? It would be much appreciated. Thank you!