<p>I would really like someone who knows this business to read my essay. I've gotten feedback from some relatives and they think it might sound too stuck up. Anyone in the mood for giving feedback? It would be very much appreciated.</p>
<p>read please?!</p>
<p>What type of sailing? If you are talking about cruising through the Med on your 50' yacht while sipping Dom Perignon and eating some beluga caviar, then yes, you may come off as a little stuck up.</p>
<p>Not quite. Just wondering about the idea of sailing in the essay. My relative's argument was that many readers on the admissions committee have never had the chance to participate in such an "elitist" sport. I'm certainly not the typical "elitist" sailor. I'm just worried about the reaction.</p>
<p>Any readers?</p>
<p>I'd say my essay is interesting. Might actually be fun to read.</p>
<p>pm me, I' ll read it.</p>
<p>Hey, I can take a look..... and trust me, if you sound arrogant, I will brutally tell you with 100% honesty :D</p>
<p>I can read it too. I need to procrastinate from doing AP homework...</p>
<p>pfff sailing is not about being rich. I am not a bit rich and in spring I will have my stersman licence exam :) </p>
<p>I think colleges will like this topic, because fighting on water builds your character.</p>
<p>anyone else?</p>
<p>Sure! I'll read it.</p>
<p>If your relatives only complaint is about the nature of the activity itself and their perceived elitism of it, I wouldn't worry about it. There are many ways to make yourself sound like a snobby rich kid in an essay, if you avoid condescending remarks and vapid generalizations then you should be fine. Actually, I personally try to avoid generalizations all together unless I attach a personal qualifier.</p>
<p>I wrote about fencing despite being under the poverty line o_o</p>
<p>Relatives are not the best judge of an essay topic, in my opinion. If you like the essay, use it.</p>
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