Essay Writing Advice

Ok so this will be a pretty long message… but I think it’s worth reading (or I wouldn’t take the time to type it all out!)

So, why do colleges have you write an essay? It’s not a chance to make excuses or add to your brag list. I suspect they really do care who you are as a person, since you will be not only a student but also someone’s roommate. A lot of the college experience is about who you talk to outside of class, and to sell a good finished product the admissions department has to find students who will enhance other students’ experience. The purpose of the essay, they say, is to give you a chance to let your personality shine through. So therefore your goal should be to make the essay as “you” as possible so they can see what makes you interesting. Note that I didn’t say what makes you unique… trying to be unique isn’t the point here. The goal is to make it so that the essay (or essays) really express who you are, or at least illustrate a couple important points about you. It’s a chance to let the adcoms sit there and think “wow, this person is really awesome, we need to have him/her at our school”.

Start early! Some people can write great essays last minute. Many people can’t. Why risk it? If you start early you will be VERY happy when all your applications are due that you’re all done with your essays while you friends are pulling all nighters.

First of all, the essay should be consistent with the rest of the application. If you have a passion for some activity, the essay is a good place to express that. If you have a really great idea that isn’t about your favorite activity, that’s fine too. Think about what you’ve alread said in the rest of the application and what the adcom still wouldn’t know about you… the essay is a place to tell them about what else makes you someone they would want at their college. You can still take about debate, for example, but talking about the day you won nationals might actually be far less effective than talking about your first debate when you almost threw up, but how you stuck with it anyway and have the award speak for itself.

I think the best essays are clear, concise, and honest. Use your own voice and avoid using big words just to use big words. Write about something that really brings out who are you. For me, the two most important things to me are 1) friends and 2) learning, so I wrote about my friends making bad math/physics puns, just hanging out and having fun joking about intellectual stuff. It was very “me”. I’ve actually sent it to a couple of people I met online in an attempt to quickly explain what’s important to me, etc. That’s the sign of a great essay… it’s so “you” you can use it as an example of what you’re like.

The topic really isn’t important at all, I’ve seen great essays about everything from a humor column to drinking tea. Cliche topics are fine. If your grandmother’s death or your trip to build houses in a third world nation really did have a huge impact on you, you can write about it. You just need to approach them in a way that shows what about the activity is important to you and make it personal, so that no one else could have written your set of essays. I’m pretty confident that if anyone else turned in my 3 short responses and extended essay to stanford it wouldn’t fit as well as it did for me.

Colleges keep saying that they want you to tell a story. One great benefit of this is that it HAS to be unique, since the same exact thing probably didn’t happen to someone else and even if it did they probably reacted differently and got something different out of the experience. A story is 1) easy for them to read and 2) is a logical way to tell them something about yourself. Everyone loves stories where the main character tries, struggles, and ultimately succeeds (think of basically any book or movie), so that’s one approach that works well.

Also, be sure to show, don’t tell. Dialogue can work well. It’s better to describe how you acted than what you felt if you can still get the emotion across.

Some ideas/themes/strategies that can work:
-My personal favorite, a flashback to the past, can help show how you’ve changed (I used this to talk about my experience in debate helping my public speaking skills and thus preparing me for scientific research presentations)
-Dialogue, just telling a story with you talking to friends or family, who said a story had to be all narration?
-Write from another point of view, I’ve seen this done really well once with someone talking about their passion for piano playing
-Analogies, make some analogy to something else… one girl wrote about how life is like a baseball game
-Just a normal story, either a process over a year or a single event in a single day… the latter is probably much easier to make work and really show not tell
I’m sure there are many others… if anyone has any other suggestions, feel free to post them, just trying to throw out some ideas to give you a sense of what you can do.

So you’ve read this far and you agree that the essay should show who you are. So how do you make that happen?

  1. Brainstorm
    Think about what is really important to you. Friends? Family? Is there some activity that you’re really passionate about? Something you believe in very strongly? What are the first few adjectives that come to mind when trying to describe yourself? What are some memories you have of events that show what you’re like or events that changed who you are? Who has influenced you most in your life? What attributes do you admire/respect? What do you read? What are some important lessons you have learned? Have you ever failed and learned something from it? Have you ever overcome a fear? What happened and how did it change you? What is interesting/unique about you? How do you approach life? How would you describe yourself to a complete stranger? Write down whatever comes to mind, even if you think it’s a dumb idea.

  2. Start Writing
    If you don’t know how to start, then begin in the middle, it doesn’t really matter. Pick one or two ideas and start writing about them. I suggest doing this on paper instead of on the computer because I know I personally censor myself less when I scribble on paper than when I type on the computer. Try a few different ideas. Most of what you write will be bad. It doesn’t matter. The point is that you’re exploring different ideas and ways to express yourself. I know I wrote like 15 or so essays (or started that many) before I came close to a final draft. I suggest you give yourself no more than 15 minutes and try to fill up at least one page. If this is giving you too much trouble, go back to step #1. If you have the option of writing more than one essay/short answer question, try to hit upon as many of the important ideas you wrote down in step #1. Don’t write your short response and long essay on the common app on the same aspect of the same activity. Each essay/short answer is an opportunity to say a little bit more about yourself.

  3. Find what’s worth saving
    Now read through all the drafts you just wrote. Any ideas that you liked? Any phrases? Anything that made you go “Wow, that’s so me!”? If not, then go back to step #2. If there was, then rewrite the essay with that thought in mind. If you don’t like it, try again. That’s the beauty of starting early, you get many chances.

  4. Revise
    Revise your essay until it begins to hint at who you are. Does it make sense? Does it have a point? What does it tell the adcom? Whoever reads your essay will probably write a couple of notes summarizing what you say, so think about what a reader might get from you essay. Play around with the idea until you’re pretty happy with the result. Read it outloud and make sure it reads well. Revise again as necessary. Reading it outloud can help you find mistakes you wouldn’t find otherwise, and will help you make sure that it flows well and that it’s your voice.

<p>5) Be more concise
This is by far the least pleasant part. Most of you will have essays that are too long and you really do want to stick to the word limits, at least within +/-10%. Besides that fact that all admissions officers-and all people for that matter- hate essays that go on and on forever (like this message, I know), it just doesn't make for great writing. Cut down your number of words by at least 20%. Figure out what the point of your essay is, and take away any words that don't illustrate that point (or points). I did this and my essays got MUCH better, especially the short answer questions. I find this process to be really difficult, but it makes such a huge positive impact on the quality of your writing that it's worth it. </p>

<p>6) Peer review
You need two types of people to read it. Give it to someone who knows you well and have them (your friend? parent? sibling?) verify that it is "you". I was all done with my extended essay and really excited to show my friend and she was like "This just isn't you... it doesn't even being to capture what you think is important...I think you need to start over". I reread the essay and agreed, and the extended essay became my note to roommate short answer response. The extended essay I eventually wrote was MUCH better and I'm really glad I followed her advice. Also have a couple people read it to check for errors and to get a first gut reaction. Have them skim the essay and jot down the first couple of things they remember about what you wrote so you have some sense how the adcoms might respond to your essay. </p>

<p>7) Check for mistakes.
Be sure you didn't mention any other college's name. Saying "... and that is why I see myself at Yale" on your Harvard application is simply not a good idea. Check for spelling mistakes and make sure your grammar and punctuation is correct. Have a friend/parent/teacher check it over too just to be sure. </p>

<p>If you really want to get a book on college essays, I suggest How to Write a Winning College Application Essay by Michael James Mason. I don't think these books help that much, but as far as such books go, this is a good one. </p>

<p>Anyway, let me know if you have any questions. Feel free to send whatever you have, ideas for essays, phrases, sentences, paragraphs, or entire essays. I'm happy to help in any way I can. I'd rather not send my own essays, although I am willing to describe what I wrote if you're curious. Just know that once orientation starts on September 20th I probably won't be around nearly as often. Good luck!</p>

<p>Thanks! I'll try to take your advice to heart. It really helped start and write my essay.</p>

<p>great advice marlgirl, very clear and concise... I'd also second the technique of trying different forms....like using a lot of dialogue, telling a story that makes your points by using a character (to get way form the tedious me, me me thing), or a mini.epic poem, or if you want to get risky, has anyone submitted a comic style graphic story? there is a great comic in the McSweeneys comic volume by LInda Barry </p>

<p><a href="http://store.mcsweeneys.net/index.cfm/fuseaction/catalog.detail/object_id/23704EB8-F337-4582-B656-C26B48545C85/McSweeneysIssue13.cfm%5B/url%5D"&gt;http://store.mcsweeneys.net/index.cfm/fuseaction/catalog.detail/object_id/23704EB8-F337-4582-B656-C26B48545C85/McSweeneysIssue13.cfm&lt;/a&gt;&lt;/p>

<p>where she goes into her alter ego, Marlys's, love of drawing and sensitivity to criticism. I thought it would make a great college essay.</p>

<p>this really is amazing....</p>

<p>great post marlgirl, I have had trouble trying to write a "unique" essay, but what you have wrote shows me I don't have to be really unique to have a unique essay. thanks.</p>

<p>glad I could help!</p>

<p>bump ......</p>

<p>This should be pinned. Great advice.</p>

<p>I agree -- this is excellent advice, and a great starting point.</p>

<p>This is great advice, thanks so much!</p>

<p>how would you go about writing your essay from a different point of view? or using characters?</p>

<p>Hm. I've always thought typing on the computer would lead me to censor myself less, but that may be just me. Writing is so obsoletely slow by hand that I just cut myself short a lot. And, well, typing's more spontaneous.</p>

<p>But good advice! Thanks! ^_^</p>

<p>Wow great advice! Just outta curiosity, what school are you headed to marlgirl?</p>

<p>umm, any advice if I don't really have any Activities and stuff that I REALLY Have a passion for. THe PSU application, which I'm stuck on actually asks us to write about an Activity. </p>

<p>Could write about a Vacation or What.</p>

<p>Or should I just say something about Basketball,,, Which in truth, is not one of my favorite things to do. and I just do it for Excercise and because it is sort of fun.</p>

<p>My EC's are 9,11,12 grade Basketball 10th grade Baseball
25 hours Community service for Church Confirmation
I was in Chess Club for one year before the Teacher left and then we didn't have it any more. (((would writing that I really liked it but was dissapointed that is was gone be acceptable))
Our school doesn't even have a NEWSPAPER,, I REALLY,really wanted to write for the Newspaper, since it was like a Seperate class. BUT a different teacher freaking left the school and for some reason the class wasn't started, because lack of students or something, which I find really dissapointing. We did try to do a newspaper during just activity period but that failed.
Weightlifting is in the Yearbook,,, is that an Activity. I did bench press 200lbs and got a T-Shirt. Would that be an Activity??? even so my school still stinks. </p>

<pre><code> Pretty much, my high school has only 400some students total and there are probably only 3-5 total clubs, like Science/French/Art and sadly that's all that I can Honestly think of. Seriously. plus we have No Tennis/Men's Volleyball or Soccer which I would have joined probably all of those. Should I say something to the fact that I have little Opportunities and I am looking forward to having more or should I reserve from complaining about my situation.
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<p>I'm reading all these other kids saying stuff like they lettered in Badmintion. WHAT THE HECK I LOVE badmintion,, I absolutely dominated in Gym Class. I would have been like State Champion for gosh sakes. That's not even fair. They better look into the fact that my school stinks compared to some of your schools.</p>

<p>NOTE :if you see this post somewhere else, don't worry, I think I may use it again so other people can comment on my frustrating situation.</p>

<p>The only sports at our school for guys are</p>

<p>Fall Golf/Cross-Country/ Football---but our school actually teams up with a different school and take a bus down there, in a 40 minute drive away.</p>

<p>Winter Basketball/Wrestling</p>

<p>Spring Baseball/Track </p>

<p>WE have Seven sports to choose from,,, and 4 Clubs. How is this fair.</p>

<p>CardinalFocused, I'll be heading up to Stanford in a couple of weeks (we don't start orientation until the 20th!)</p>

<p>I was just wondering... does the essay topics change every year?</p>

<p>WOW I admire you marlgirl! I aspire to transfer into Stanford--Its a ridiculously awesome school.</p>

<p>so can i send you my essay n u edit it??</p>

<p>Thanks so much... this is so helpful : )</p>