Feedback and criticism on my Common App essay #1?

College Essays
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Hello,

I have written my Common App essay and I am almost ready to submit my application for my early action schools but I would really appreciate a few more critiques of my essay. If anyone is willing to read my essay, please let me know and I will PM the essay to you! Thank you so much :slight_smile:

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I can read it if you still have it.

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I’ll read it! :slight_smile:

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@txsciencenerd @AcceptableName I PM’d you both :slight_smile: Thank you!

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Sure :slight_smile:

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I’ll read it as well.

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I can read it too :slight_smile: