Feedback on two essays please?

<p>Anybody want to read my GA Tech Essay or my UMICH short answer? I'm not too happy with either of them but I don't know what to do to better them. Thanks!</p>

<p>Hey, I'll read them for you. I'm class of '09, but I'm not applying to either of those schools. :)</p>

<p>ill look at them pm them to me</p>

<p>pm me for some really good, analytical editing. :)</p>

<p>i am a sophmore in college i will read</p>