First generation American and first in family to go to college, essay question!

I’m wondering if anyone would be able to help me by reading my essay for admission into Columbia’s GS spring term?

Nicole,

I would love to help read your essay and offer up suggestions. I have already assisted 2 friends during their process, and would always love to help another prospective GS student.
If you still want assistance on the essay, email me your essay and I’ll look it over

Jacob.Case90 @ Gmail