Guide to Crafting Differentiated, Powerful Essays - Part 2 (Making Your Essay the 1 in 1000)

<p>This is the good stuff. What if I can guarantee you that your essay can be the 1 in 1000, regardless of what experiences you have had in your life? </p>

<p>“What?!?!?! Even me? But my life has been so boring, I haven’t faced crazy adversity or won any national awards?”
Guess what? I don’t care. You can still be the 1 in 1000. Here’s how…</p>

<p>Ask smart questions about your topic, and use those smart questions to come up with 5-6 critical elements to your essay. While those 5-6 critical elements may be unoriginal in isolation, you create a unique essay by threading those elements together in a thoughtful way.</p>

<p>Even if you’re competing with the most original, unique stories from your competitors, most won’t go to the deep and thoughtful level of your essay. And guess what? If I’m in admissions, I ask myself “how will student XYZ enrich and add to the experience of our student body if we accept this person?</p>

<p>That’s far more valuable than a “unique” essay topic. The only thing a truly unique topic has as a competitive advantage over you is that the unique 1 in 1000 experience has a tendency to more naturally answer those questions. But anyone can answer those questions. Anyone can do it. Most don’t because they’re ignorant or lazy.This is how ANYONE can be the 1 in 1000.</p>

<p>Let’s say you want to write on the most boring topic ever…a travel story.</p>

<p>PRIMARY TOPIC</p>

<p>So yah, hundreds of people write on that every year. No, it might even be less because it’s such a boring topic that people actively try and avoid it. Now…let’s morph it.
1) Was this a vacation with parents, a vacation with friends, a missionary trip, etc.?
2) Why did you go? Was it on your own will?
3) What did you learn from the trip? How did you grow?
4) How does the trip reflect your personality? How does it exemplify the type of energy/vibe you’re going to radiate at my college if I accept you?</p>

<p>I mean…better. You naturally would touch on some of these topics, but keeping those topics in mind and explicitly (or implicitly) expressing them on the essay does give you some depth. Now, let’s overlay the primary topic with a secondary topic.</p>

<p>SECONDARY TOPIC</p>

<p>Alright, let’s make this an even more boring scenario. You went with your family.
1) What’s your most interesting relationship between your family? Annoying sister? Cool dad? Weird step-mom?
2) Which relationship was progressed the most in the trip and why /// what relationship was not progressed despite your desire to progress it?
3) Did a relationship change because you wanted it to change, or was there an unexpected change.
4) Was there a unique dynamic to your relationship that was exemplified during this trip?</p>

<p>TERTIARY TOPIC</p>

<p>Alright, let’s make this the most boring scenario. You didn't even go anywhere cool.
1) What did you emotionally experience from being on this vacation? How does that contrast?
2) Was this trip even meaningful? Was it your first time doing something or going somewhere? Or have you gone there before?</p>

<p>Okay…so putting it all together. **Here’s a 1 in 1000 essay. **This mirrors an actual essay that was highly, highly successful in admissions results from a few years ago (by this site’s standards).</p>

<p>You go on regular fishing trips with your family. It’s a ritual, a habit, something reliable and predictable. Nothing special happens every time, but the experience of going on these trips is special because you can get away from this distracted world of smartphones and Snapchat to just…bond with your dad (Include 2 examples). Even though you don’t have the money to travel internationally, the most valuable experiences you have are ones when you can get closer with the people you care about. You’re a firm believer in having a foundation. These boring times build a foundation that allows you to hold steady in the most crazy times (give an example). It’s going to be weird leaving behind these fishing trips when you go to college, but at the same time, you have 4 dedicated years of being around your peers to build these relationships every day. To build new, boring, and memorable habits. The best experiences of them all. </p>

<p>Now…literally, that was the most unoriginal life experience. And seriously, if you complain about not having regular fishing trips you go on with your family, you’re completely missing the point and I give up on you hahaha.</p>

<p>Note, I said 1 in 1000 because over the course of an admissions officer’s career, there will be essays that contain similar elements to this one. However, you don’t need to be the 1 in 1,000,0000. Being 1 in 1000 is close enough to make you stand out in an admissions cycle, which is all that matters. Too many people try to go for the home run. All I care about is the result: admissions.</p>

<p>Check my post history for part 1. I will keep blogging throughout this year’s admissions cycle.</p>

<p>I cannot guarantee you anything, but I can give you your best chance.</p>

<p>P.S. I’m available to help anyone with one essay via PM as well, as long as you send it to me 1 week before the deadline as I am busy with my job during most days.</p>

<p>This is wonderful advice! I’m surprised you haven’t gotten more replies; you really should consider writing a book. Would you mind taking a look at my Common App essay, if you aren’t too busy right now? </p>

<p>In the past there have been plenty of people willing to help on CC, but over the years the quality of those people have sharply dropped. Additionally, I’m at a place now in my professional life where I am grateful and feel a need to give back.</p>

<p>Oh, and PM it to me.</p>

<p>Better advice in two posts than most of the stuff I’ve seen on these forums combined.
Would you be willing to read my Common App, too? Don’t want to create more work for you, but I figure it doesn’t hurt to ask!</p>

<p>Here is the link to Part 1: <a href=“Ultimate Guide to Crafting Differentiated, Powerful Essays - Part 1 (Finding the Perfect Topic) - College Essays - College Confidential Forums”>Ultimate Guide to Crafting Differentiated, Powerful Essays - Part 1 (Finding the Perfect Topic) - College Essays - College Confidential Forums;

<p>Thanks for the link dyiu13!</p>

<p>@TheOmniscient‌ Can you help me out with my essay? I can’t find the PM button on your profile.</p>

<p>Not only is this post excellent advice for the college application essay, it is excellent advice for every paper you will write in college. </p>

<p>Topic is the least important decision of any paper. What matters is how you dig into the topic. Doing this kind of tunneling into the most utterly boring assignments of my college career had a hilarious tendency to lead to the assigning professor wanting to submit me for an undergraduate writing award–on the very topics by which I was least inspired!</p>

<p>A diamond in the rough is ugly and unremarkable; it only sparkles when you chip away at it.</p>

<p>@TheOmniscient‌</p>

<p>You give good advice, but you will find that the students who come to this forum are really not that interested in general advice. They want very specific advice on THEIR essays. I have posted a lot advice here, but the responses I get are PMs asking me to read their essays. I am usually shocked by how blah they tend to be, violating so much of the “Don’t-Do-This” advice.</p>

<p>However, I did get one PM asking me to read a student’s essay and when I did, I found it to be - BY FAR - the best essay I’ve ever read. I advised her to not polish it, not edit it, and to not change a word! She got admitted to every elite college she applied to (except Yale), and ended up at a great school with a full ride. I know her essay lifted her to the top of the pack. </p>

<p>One former elite admissions officer read it and told me, “I’d accept this person just based on the essay, unless she were an ax murderer. On second thought, I’d take away her ax and admit her anyway.” The essay topic: Her meeting a great guy and the few hours after that meeting. But under that seemingly mundane topic was a world of insight into who she was.</p>

<p>That essay made my day, my YEAR. </p>

<p>So every once in a while, serendipity happens.</p>

<p>Yes, I know your situation from also helping students in the past through several message boards and real life acquaintances. </p>

<p>Someones you go a year without reading one of “those” essays. But yes, I’ve read them before. </p>

<p>That in isolation does not make our time investment worth it. To me, it’s the impact we make and the relationships we forge from these encounters that make it all the more meaningful.</p>

<p>It’s also why I’m a saddened whenever people stop responding after you send the essay corrections back. But, thus is life. </p>

<p>@TheOmniscient Thank you so much for the informative post!! Would you be willing to take a look at my Common App essay?</p>

<p>@TheOmniscient‌ - Good advice. I like Alan Gelb’s (author of essay book) advice for essays: “Never complain, explain, or brag.”</p>

<p>Part 3 is up now, and I’m releasing part 4 tomorrow.</p>

<p>Part 4 - <a href=“Guide to Crafting Differentiated, Powerful Essays - Part 4 (10 Tests EVERY Essay Must Pass) - College Essays - College Confidential Forums”>Guide to Crafting Differentiated, Powerful Essays - Part 4 (10 Tests EVERY Essay Must Pass) - College Essays - College Confidential Forums;

<p>BUMP. Will be releasing next part of this series in the next day or so (slammed with work the past month).</p>

<p>Bump, work delaying the next batch so I just encourage people to look at these for now.</p>