HELP! HELP! Potential NYU Stern applicant!!!

Chance Me / Match Me!
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<p>Gender: Male
Ethnicity: Pakistani
Residing in New York
High School Type: Public
Prospective Major: Finance </p>

<p>GPA: UW: 91 Our school does not weight average to determine GPA, or even class rank :(</p>

<p>Courseload: </p>

<p>Freshmen: Accelerated/ Honor</p>

<p>Sophmore: All Honors/ AP European History ( I got a (1) on the test, however, my grandmother passed away the previous day, what could I do?) </p>

<p>Junior: All Honors(except Physics)/ AP US History (4), AP English (4), and Self Study; Human Geography (4), and AP Psychology (5) </p>

<p>Senior: All AP Classes geared toward Business/ Economics. </p>

<p>Top 20% ( But I do belong in the top ten percent if my school weighted my GPA)</p>

<p>SAT I Math: 750
SAT I CR: 670 ( I am actually very proud of this score, because it was quite honestly the best I can do.)
SAT I Writing: 710
Total Score: 2130 </p>

<p>SAT II Spanish w/ listening: 750
SAT II Math I ( The harder one): 750 </p>

<p>Sports: </p>

<p>Varsity Wrestler; Awards, distinctions, service hours, such as helping young kids wrestle. Journeymen clinic member; 2 years. Wrestling for total of 5 years.</p>

<p>Club Soccer: 8 years, with distinctions</p>

<p>Track and Field: 4 years</p>

<p>Jui-Jitsu: 8 years, went to various tournaments, and I help teach younger children and grown adults proper technique at a local clinic. </p>

<p>Extra Curriculars: </p>

<p>1) Medical Club President (9, 10, 11, 12)
2) Free the Children; member then President (10, 11, 12)
3) Student Government President; Member for freshmen year, VP Sophmore and Junior Year, President Grade 12.
4) Competed in Math league tournaments
5) National Honor Society Tutor for Math ( 10, 11, 12)
6) Service hours in a children's intensive care unit: 100 hours
7) Mosque Youth Group: 100 Hours
8) I undertook an internship at Merill Lynch under my first cousin who is a floor manager: 240 hours; $10/ hour ( I got paid!)
9) I went to a "Summer@Brown" Program for two summers, 1 week, then 3 week program.</p>

<p>Awards: </p>

<p>1) YMCA Award of Community Service
2) AP Scholar with Honor
3) I won a Price Chopper Scholarship; 2000 dollars, and other small time scholarships.</p>

<p>Essay: Great! I hired a professional to revise it, and help me write it, not generic at all! </p>

<p>Recommendations: </p>

<p>1) I got a recommendation from my Cousin’s supervisor at Merril Lynch! ( AMAZING)
2) Recommendation from School Counselor was excellent.
3) Recommendation from AP English teacher was excellent ( He let me read it) </p>

<p>Potential “hooks” :</p>

<p>1) I speak 3 languages besides English ( Urdu/hindi, Spanish, and learning Arabic through Rosetta Stone)
2) My two first cousins when to Stern, and another is getting a Doctorate’s degree for Business from there.
3) I am setting an internship for Dubai, UAE and Doha, Qatar this summer for top financial institutions, and I am definitely going there over the summer to do an internship! ( I want to live and work there when I get older) </p>

<p>Thank you guys for reading my long and grueling Resume of sorts, and here are the Business Schools I am interested in: ( oh, and I was raised in Brooklyn for around 5 years after I was born upstate, so I am a city person mostly.) Thank you!!! </p>

<p>1) U Penn; Wharton ( what if I did ED?)
2) NYU; Stern ( I am currently leaning towards EDing here, 85% Chance I will)
3) Boston College; Carroll
4) George Washington University
5) UC Berkeley; Haas
6) Fordham
7) RPI; Lally
8) Union College</p>

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<p>pretty impressive and you look like u have a pretty High chance of getting into stern but why would u hire somebody to help u write an essay, thats what counselors and your ap enlish teacher could of come in handy instead of hiring someone to do it</p>

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<p>Well it was around 200 dollars for the person for about a day, he was a PhD in English, he did over 200 essays, and the applicants for whom he picks is selective, he is my neighbor, and he just knows his stuff, honestly. Oh and his sons got accepted to Harvard and his father wrote their essays completely, and his younger son ( no offense, isn't the "normal" applicant I guess for ivies, as in he didn't do amazing in high school.) He helped me a lot, and oh his PhD is from Harvard too.</p>

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<p>Bump 10 char</p>

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<p>Just because the guy has a Ph. D. in English doesn't necessarily mean that he's better than those who have, say, a Master's in the field and has been working in that field for over three decades. The fact that he has received his degree from Harvard U. doesn't really make anything much better. Sure, it's a prestigious university, but prestige is not everything.</p>

<p>And besides, the essay should be YOUR voice, not the voice of a professor.</p>

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<p>1) U Penn; Wharton ( what if I did ED?)- without ED probably denial, with ed, still a reach
2) NYU; Stern ( I am currently leaning towards EDing here, 85% Chance I will)- if u ED then i am 75% sure ull get in.
3) Boston College; Carroll- dont know
4) George Washington University-dont know
5) UC Berkeley; Haas- Harder for OOS students to get in, very low match, low reach
6) Fordham- dont know
7) RPI; Lally-dont know
8) Union College-dont know</p>

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<p>Falthor, the essay is my voice, and honestly, it is all about me, he did not change the structure too much, he just put in his feedback, and he has done this for over 200 essays of other people who he documents, and the school they get into are all good schools. My essay was very strong, and both my AP English teacher, and my Counselor, and my friends liked it a lot. He was just easy to go to.</p>

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<p>You DID lose out on money, though. But all for the best, I guess. People have different ways of getting into college. I'm not good at this kind of stuff, so I can't provide any feedback whatsoever.</p>

<p>(Edit) By the way, you mind answering my question in my other thread, please? I'm also not good at ED and whatnot...what a shame.</p>

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<p>RPI has a business school?</p>

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<p>Yes, I did a college visit, and you can look at Businessweek for their top rankings. What do you think my chances are?</p>

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<p>Your SAT Math is average for Stern applicants. Low Reading and Ok Writing. GPA and rank are on the low-side, but unweighted GPA/Rank makes up for that partially. EC's are great, that will be your strong point. Recs., if they really are excellent, will make up for the stuff even more. </p>

<p>Internship at M.L., especially for Stern, is invaluable. Demonstrates passion and excellence, considering to get a proud investment firm to get a high school student in the ir office when such internships are so selective for college students already is very impressive. That, with a strong essay, is the top-off factor.</p>

<p>Overall, your GPA and Rank hurt you, but the rest of your application is ideal. In at NYU Stern (80%+ Chance, subjective factors might sway in between). At Wharton the rank might put you out of the running. In at all the rest with likely scholarship money.</p>

<p>The one thing you got to learn about CC too is that most people reply to chance threads without actually taking the effort to chance people. Even more look without replying at all.</p>

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<p>Yes you are correct, I figured that out. Thank you for chancing me NY__Democrat( Go Obama!)</p>

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<p>gpa is a little low for NYU but everthing else looks awesome i say Match/low Reach</p>

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<p>I think with a strong essay, which you appear to have, you've got a more than 50% shot at Wharton and Stern, and very high chance at all the others. I mean, overall, your scores arent amazing, but everything else makes up for it.</p>

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<p>Thank you guys so much, I really really want to get into Stern, being raised in Brooklyn, and spending time there ( even though I was only 5-ish years old) was the best experience i had, Brooklyn pizza, manhattan shopping, I love everything about the city, and when I was self studying for AP Psychology, I found out the first 3 years of your life is actually the most influential, so I guess this can be explained as a means to why I love Stern so much- it is in the city! ( oh and UPenn, when I visited, doesn't exactly have the nicest campus, and the Pennsylvania skyline isn't the most beautiful in the world either.) Keep chancing please!</p>

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<p>UPenn is a reach, but with a great essay, you've got a good shot everywhere else.</p>

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<p>1) U Penn; Wharton - have a chance, but most liekely rejected, but you never know!
2) NYU; Stern - Id say you're in
3) Boston College; Dont know
4) George Washington- Dont know
5) UC Berkeley; Haas - OOS is TOUGH... Low Reach I would say
6) Fordham- IN!
7) RPI; Lally - IN
8) Union College - I don't know</p>

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<p>1) U Penn; Wharton ( what if I did ED?)- reach, many many TOP students ED to Wharton and it is a very competitive program even though your stats are still pretty good.<br>
2) NYU; Stern ( I am currently leaning towards EDing here, 85% Chance I will)- high match, competitive but much better chance of being accepted than U Penn
3) Boston College; Carroll- Match
4) George Washington University-match
5) UC Berkeley; Haas- reach (out of state)
6) Fordham-safety
7) RPI; Lally-?? safety
8) Union College-safety??</p>

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<p>1) U Penn; Wharton ( what if I did ED?) high reach
2) NYU; Stern ( I am currently leaning towards EDing here, 85% Chance I will)- match
3) Boston College - match
4) George Washington University- match
5) UC Berkeley - high match/low reach
6) Fordham- in
7) RPI - in/low match
8) Union College - dont know</p>

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<p>wait. i actually think you're going to get into stern. you have incredible leadership, strong test scores, and obviously a strong desire to go there. I think that if you apply ED you're in for sure, but RD might be a little harder (lots of wharton/mit/umich rejects will be competing for those spots).</p>