I desperately need someone to read my important personal statement!

<p>My personal statement is important to my application. If someone could give it a read through and tell me what they think and how I can improve upon it, it would be greatly appreciated.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

<p>I’d be more than happy to. :]
Although I’m a senior, I’m basically finished with my application process</p>

<p>I can read it if you want (senior here as well though).</p>