is this sentence grammatically correct?

College Essays
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<p>I think it is, but I've looked at this stuff for so long I'm starting to second guess myself//</p>

<p>"When I participate in an Earth festival teaching children about the importance of compost, when I help fellow students pick up their belongings in the hallway, or when I raise money for the Rockford Rescue Mission; I’ve started my ultimate goal to live an unsettling life."</p>

<p>Am I grammatically correct?</p>

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<p>Should be:</p>

<p>“When I participate in an Earth festival teaching children about the importance of compost, help fellow students pick up their belongings in the hallway, or raise money for the Rockford Rescue Mission, I have started my ultimate goal to live an unsettling life.”</p>

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<p>I don’t mean to hijack your thread, but I also have a sentence question (and it would not make sense to make a whole new topic to post it)</p>

<p>In the following sentence, which form of the word “diagnose” should I use? “Diagnosis” or “diagnosed”?</p>

<p>“Since diagnosis at age ten, one daunting word has haunted my childhood:…”</p>

<p>If it is “diagnosed”, should I include a “being” in front of it? “Since being diagnosed…”?</p>

<p>Thanks :-)</p>

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<p>I think it’s just a personal preference. </p>

<p>Personally, I think “Since being diagnosed” sounds better!</p>

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<p>You have a misplaced modifer.</p>

<p>“Since diagnosis at age ten” needs to refer to you not “word.” A word cannot be diagnosed with something - only a person can.</p>

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<p>Thank you :-)</p>

<p>Apologies to the author :-(</p>