Is this topic fine for the CommonApp essay?

Applying to College
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<p>So I've gotten some feedback from friends and teachers, but I want some input from general people. I chose to answer prop 1 from the CommonApp essay, which says:</p>

<p>Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.</p>

<p>I'm planning to apply to Ivy Leagues, so I want to know if religion a fine topic to discuss in this, specifically mine (Islam)? And if so, if this introduction is Ivy-worthy (I'm talking about how religion has been so central to my upbringings): </p>

<p>The low, serene hymn of our voices wafts generously throughout the house. Every bulb inside is burning and suffices before the first light slices the morning sky and pours through the living room window. My siblings and I sit anchored to the mattresses that make for loveseats, each clutching an opened Holy Quran in our hands. We recite verses, imprinting the words into our minds until we’ve affirmed to familiarizing with them in the likeliness of our own names. Occasionally, a gruff stammer can be heard from my father memorizing in the first living room, his memory withered with age. We beat on against the early hour, as we have since the time we could read. It’s a five o’clock morning.</p>

<p>Thanks!</p>

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<p>If it’s central to your identity and you believe it really defines you as a person that isn’t explicit in the rest of your application, go for it!</p>

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<p>americanexpress Thank you! Linguistically, do you think my writing would be Ivy-worthy?</p>

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<p>Definitely, theres some beautiful imagery in there.</p>

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<p>Your writing brought chills to me! Double check some of your grammar and word choice for correctness. Your essay will be beautiful.</p>

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<p>I loved the introduction! Although the end “It’s a five o’clock in the morning” is a little too Mario Bros. for me, could do without the “a” lol</p>