<p>My essay is long and vivid; it is about a circle of friends I had forever and how we did everything together. There is a part where I am listing the things we did together for the first time. Right after I talked about the first time we kissed someone, I mentioned the first time we "played beer bong together" together. I'm trying to show how we, as a group, matured and watched out for each other. It's not awkward, and I think it's a powerful point in the essay.</p>
<p>But none of that matters, if it's inappropriate? Should I just take it out to be safe? Or leave it in to be a little edgier, and more real? </p>
<p>It's to the U of Chicago, so little more liberal, maybe? Not sure.</p>
<p>That's a tough one. I say don't mention it.... even though I'm sure most adcoms know that some high schoolers drink, I don't think it's something you want to mention, unless it has some kind of redemptive quality to it (i.e. you got totally wasted and you learned a lesson from it, etc.)</p>
<p>Then again, maybe it's your tone that's the issue. If you do it in a way that's like, "We played beer pong and it TOTALLY ROCKED!!!!" I don't think that's going to fly. However, if you use it as a sign of maturing and as a symbol of adolescent experimentation, I think that's okay.</p>
<p>Maturity can be many things such as viewpoint, character, and personality. Talking about something like drinking and etc might be trying to push the line between a good essay and a good laugh. Although it can be an outstanding essay if it is done in the right context. I would go with something safer that can still portray your journey of maturation.</p>