<p>Can what we value be determined only by what we sacrifice? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
<p>Yes, what we value can only be determined by what we sacrifice. A person values and has a person for a plethora number of things. However, for that person to distinguish among what he values most and what he doesn't, he has to be wiling to sacrifice something to show that he truly values it. The two examples of people that display the characteristic of sacrificing something for what they value are Martin Luther King Jr. and Abdul Qadeer Khan.</p>
<p>Martin Luther King was a person filled with love and passion. He valued many things: his wife, kids, parents, and friends. However, the one thing that he valued most was getting freedom rights for blacks. To display his importance for that value, he went as far as to risk his life for what he valued. THough Martin Luther King was black at a time when the blacks were segregated against to such an extent that they were considered inferior to animals, Martin Luther stuck up for what he valued - obtaining rights for blacks- and in the end, though he ended up getting murdered, Martin Luther King availed the freedom rights for all African Americans. He valued gettign freedom rights for blacks and he did so in the end even though he had to sacrifice his life.</p>
<p>Another example of a person that sacrificed something for what he valued is Abdul Qadeer Khan. Abdul Qadeer Khan was a brilliant young man- a mere genius so to say. He was born in Pakistan into a family with financial troubles. He eventually grew up and decided he wanted to serve his country Pakistan because he valued it so much and decided to do something that will be beneficial for his country. At the young age of 21, he went to Russia for education in nuclear engineering. Surprisingly, he worked at a place where nuclear bombs were made. Though he wasn't allowed to bring any paper or writing utencils, he memorized all the technicalities that goes into making a nuclear bomb. Afterwards, he went back to Pakistan and with all the information that he had burdened into his brain, he used it to make the nuclear bomb for Pakistan. Though he succeeded and made Pakistan one of the ten countries with nuclear weapons, he had to sacrifice his life and he was given life sentence for stealing. This was not stealing because he was a super genius and it's not easy to memorize 1000's of pages . However, he still is a hero to the people of Pakistan. Therefore, Abdul Qadeer Khan was a genius who valued his country and sacrificed his life for it.</p>
<p>One needs to sacrifice something for what he truly values . The two people that sacrificed something for what they valued are Martin Luther King Jr. and Abdul Qadeer Khan.</p>
<p>Your conclusion at the end is a bit abrupt. You seem to end it by giving examples of people who made sacrifices rather than giving reasons why sacrifices were necessary. The focal point of a conclusion needs to be on what the prompt asks originally . . .</p>
<p>i really dont understand how people could write better than OP's essay in 25 minutes. i thought it was pretty good. but if OP dont mind i'll post my essay.
iam a horrible writer, so dont be too harsh on it. give a score to it please.</p>
<p>Question: Do we need other people in order to understand ourselves?</p>
<p>The way we view ourselves are impacted by our biased feelings and desire to be perfect. Narrow mindedness and egotism will cripple our ability to see our true characters. However, because outsiders are freee from our influence on judging us, they will be able to see the true faces that we often fail to recognize. By interacting with each other and revealing our true selves, we discover who we truly are. After all we are social beings, we learn from the way others see us.</p>
<p>In the story that many have once hear, Tarzan is left in the forest to be grown up believing himself as an animal. When he encounters human beings, he is confused about his identity. For a while, he wanders aorund wihtout understanding himself. He has always been an animal on four legs. BUt the increasing interaction with the humans helped him to discover who he really was. For a long time, Tarzan had a narrow mind, mind of an animal, but when he was introduced to other's view of him as a savage, he learned to differentiate aspects of animals to those of humans in himself. </p>
<p>Even in my personal life, I'm influnece by my surroundings. Although I want to view myself as a perfect person, other's opinions that are outright and truthful destroy my ego. From this, I learned who I turly am. when i'm asked to describe myself, I fail to answer. But when I'm asked to describe how others view me, I am able to list numerous things I have heard. These "truthful" opinions of my character substantiated and substituted the way I am. I now view myself as what people often view me as.</p>
<p>In our society, everyone is interconnected with each other, thus they interract and reveal their characters. Because others judge us by their opinoins, we learn the views unaffected by our views. These help us to shape our characters, and importantly change our lives.</p>
<p>i'm sorry but reading Tarzan out loud to myself made me crack up. that seems like a silly reference but i dont know how they grade. i'm no expert. no offence.</p>
<p>Words don't matter, you have 46 lines and can not go over that.</p>
<p>Technically speaking, graders are not supposed to take away from your score based on a missing or abrupt conclusion, but the official rules also say that they are graded holistically - meaning that the conclusion can leave an impression.</p>
<p>I'd give it two 5's, for a 10/12. Good references to historical figures, and decent length. Most people don't even mention external examples, so you've got serious points there.</p>