need some guidance with common app essay

Hi everyone!

So I have been struggling with the general Common App transfer essay which basically asks why you want to transfer and what your goals are for your new school. I have a pretty rough version of it, and was wondering if anyone would be willing to read it? I have many phrases which I would like to edit, but I need some guidance on whether I’m going in the right direction with the essay or if I should change my approach. For me it’s been a lot more difficult to write this one than the freshman application essay. I’d really really appreciate some help! Thanks!!

Sure. PM me!