PLEASE- need help on UC essay

[momo224]

<p>I'm having a difficult time writing essay #1 for the UC application.
Can anyone give any advice or help me revise what I have written so far?
Thank you!</p>

[ruskie]

<p>sure pm me</p>

[ssdfa123]

<p>sure id be happy to
PM me</p>

[starmia]

<p>I can read it =]</p>