please read my UC essay

<p>this is my first time on this site (i found it while trying to find the essay prompt) and i need someone to proof read my essay. i've asked a couple friends to proof it but they've all said different things (one said to completely rewrite it) but i dont have the time anymore (i have alot of activities this month) and i need to write 2 more essays, one more for UC and one for USC. so please help me proof it. thank you in advance</p>

<p>i'll give it a go.</p>

<p>I will help</p>

<p>ill help you proofread</p>

<p>show it to us!</p>

<p>PM it over...I would love to proofread</p>

<p>I'm non-08 and I'd gladly help</p>

<p>Shoot a PM to me...I'd love to read it. Just tell me which prompt it's for.</p>

<p>-________________- i send a copy of it to the people who requested and no1 has gotten back to me x.x is it that bad?</p>

<p>send me a PM</p>

<p>send me a PM------im sure its not that bad</p>

<p>Sure. PM it on over.</p>

<p>I'll read it as well</p>