Prospective Transfer's Why Reed Essay

<p>I'm a freshman looking to transfer to Reed for the 2014-2015 school year. </p>

<p>Would you care to read my essay and give me some pointers? My concern is that because I wrote this just after reading Thus Spoke Zarathustra, the essay is heavily stylized and maybe a little too dramatic. </p>

<p>If it is important, I applied to Reed after my senior year of high school and was not accepted. I am doing considerably better in college than in my senior year, having so far earned a 3.8 gpa for the Fall term.</p>