Question about Tone of a Scholarship

Paying for College
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<p>There is a small scholarship that my school offers. It is judged by a community of parents that are trying to understand the individual within an essay.</p>

<p>My question is: Should I make the tone of the essay a little lighter?</p>

<p>And at the end, I wrote "Thank you for your time." Is that appropriate?
And I also ended with "Sincerely, My name" <--ha, I actually almost wrote it</p>

<p>Anyways, since it is for a smaller community, and not a national one, is the tone allowed to steer away from formal?</p>

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<p>I think that is perfectly appropriate.</p>

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<p>Hmmm...maybe consider an ending something like "your comments and questions are invited and encouraged; I look forward to learning your decision". </p>

<p>I wouldn't steer away from formal. Even if small, and local, they may interpret less formal as less serious or less desirous (sp?) of the scholarship.</p>

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<p>^^</p>

<p>That's a good suggestion, thanks.</p>