<p>So I applied to Purdue at West Lafayette. I already sent in this application because I was stupid and I asked my two friends to review it and they said it was fine. As I look at it now, I'm freaking out hardcore thinking my essay is really crappy.</p>
<p>The essay topic I picked was pick two people living or deceased and what would you talk about with them(P.S sorry, Forums hates tabbing for some reason)</p>
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<p>Its a grimy day as I walk through the streets of the small town of Motton, Maine. The strong smell of carbon emissions and cigarette smoke unwelcomingly breeze across my face. My nose scrunches, my lungs tighten, and my vision blurs. It is appalling that the inhabitants dont even fuss about the vileness of what is labeled as air. I see at the end of the block, a small black board sign with the words café chalked on in alternating tropical colors. The bright warm colors contrasting to the grayness of its environment allure me, as if it were putting me in a trance like hypnosis, beckoning me to enter. </p>
<p>I open the door and am greeted with a rush of warm air and lively chatter. My face begins to redden from the sudden heat and my ears begin to sting. I look around briefly when my eyes catch the two most depressing, gritty, frightening writers sitting at opposite ends of a table, Cormac Mccarthy and Stephen King. Cormac Mccarthy is the writer of one of the most depressing depictions of a father and his son, desperately trying to survive in a harsh, post apocalyptic world titled The Road. He also wrote a book about a Texan who lucks upon finding millions of dollars from a drug deal that went bad however is a chase of his life when he is hunted by a crazed assassin that even kills his own employers just so he can have all of the money called No Country for Old Men. Stephen King on the other hand, is the writer to one of the most breath taking, mouth dropping, scary author of The Stand. I would instantly gush over them about how inhumane their writings are and how it requires one sick puppy to be able to stomach through the writing process of the books. The first thing to mind is how are the two able to actually live happy lives, knowing they just put to life some of the most horrific tales. It would seem to me that if I were to create something like IT or Randal Flagg, I would be having constant night terrors of my own creations and would live my life in solitude for fear that I would accidently plague others with my ideas. Then I would ask for how the writers got into writing these tales and why they enjoy writing them? Cormac would have difficulty for he has only written little of the genre of Horror however I specifically would like to dissect Stephen Kings mind on why he just keeps cranking out best selling horror novels like they are hot cakes and what does he enjoys about them so much. Would it be a case of schidenfrueder that Stephen has where he loves to see people cringe and faces grow pale from reading? Or would it be a case of a deep message that Cormac wants to place on readers that we should be fearful of what a future of ecological destruction and constant warfare holds for society?</p>
<p>I would then discuss if the two are able to write a collaboration book where Stephen King incorporated his depressingly realistic settings of the world around us and his realistic descriptions of people that are unique with their own set of quirks and flaws that are still however relatable and Cormac Mccarthys horrific details of humans reverting back to their animal instinct and adrenaline rushing situations where the main character is literally seconds away from his/her death as the antagonist searches for his victim with a bloodied axe. </p>
<p>I would finally end the conversation to ask, what do the two think of the film adaptations of their movies? As most people know, many times directors and writers attempt to convert popular books and other sources of media into film adaptations of them and most of the time they fail. In my opinion the Stand was satisfyingly done while The Road and No country for Old Men was done excellently even though The Road had to hold back on a few disturbing scenes in the movie version. I would shake the twos hands and leave the café, back into the streets but, in a happier mood knowing that at least Im not a character of the twos books.</p>
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<p>I feel like I had the right tone and the right writing style however, I'm freaking out because I realized that the third paragraph is one sentence. Then I realized that I botched two sentences. Lastly, I realize my concluding sentence is super quirky. Here they are,</p>
<p>"He also wrote a book about a Texan who lucks upon finding millions of dollars from a drug deal that went bad however is a chase of his life when he is hunted by a crazed assassin that even kills his own employers just so he can have all of the money called No Country for Old Men."</p>
<p>"Stephen King on the other hand, is the writer to one of the most breath taking, mouth dropping, scary author of The Stand."</p>
<p>What I mean by super quirky is that I feel like it's cute and if the Admission officer isn't exactly a light hearted person, they would wince in pain from the last sentence. </p>
<p>I am asking for simply this, give me a rating on my essay.</p>
<p>1- I should be burned
2- Crap
3- Crappy
4- below average
5- average
6- above average
7- great for a good state university
8- great for tier one school
9- great for Ivy League
10- I am a best selling author.</p>