Read over my common app essay?

<p>Hi everyone. I just finished writing what i hope is a good essay for the common app. I wrote it about a trip i had to Egypt, the imagination it sparked, and my struggle to find the one dream that i want to follow. I think it's an interesting read, but i would really appreciate another pair of eyes. Anyone willing to read it over and tell me what they think? Thanks!</p>

<p>Bump!</p>

<p>Anyone?</p>