Second Chance admission essay help!

Hi everyone! I’m looking for some help.

I currently want to apply for a transfer to a new school to enter in their second chance program (gives students with low gpa an opportunity to explain their academic history and request special admission)

It needs to be less than 500 words and I am having some difficulty condensing all that I want to say, in only 500 words. I would really appreciate the help.

I am desperate for a new chance at school. Since I’ve started working full time as a para, I have been extremely motivated to go back and finish with a degree in psychology.


To the Second Chance Committee,

I am writing to ask for a transfer over to ___ from ____. While at _, admittedly, I was not a good student at all. I have been placed on academic probation before, and failed to take the necessary actions to succeed in school. There is no specific person or event that I could place blame on. My failure to succeed in school is of my own doing. I have unknowingly lived with depression for many years now, and have been diagnosed with Bipolar II Disorder.

Before I sought out professional help, I couldn’t understand why I felt the way I did. There were times where I didn’t have the energy to get up in the mornings, and had absolutely no will to go on with my day. Sometimes, I would stay awake for days, due to insane racing thoughts, and not be able to concentrate in class because of lack of sleep. There would be other days where I would have extreme anxiety about the days I missed class because of my depressive mood. However, I lived with intense guilt every day because I was failing all of my classes due to my own actions. The guilt was the worst to deal with; I was letting both my parents down, and I was letting myself down. Perhaps what was most frustrating was, I didn’t know why my brain worked the way it did.

Once the symptoms worsen, I decided that I had to seek professional help. When I was diagnosed with Bipolar Disorder, things started to make sense to me. I was wary of my diagnosis, and it was hard to believe at first. I started doing my own research of my diagnosis, and reading books on how to combat my symptoms. I was able to slowly teach myself how to properly function, and how to finally take responsibility for my own life.

The last class I had taken at ____, was during the recent winter session. I continuously put in the effort to study the material, show up everyday, and come prepared. As a result, I received an A in that class. Despite having a passing grade. I chose not to register myself for classes since then.

I stopped attending ____ to pursue a job as a substitute paraprofessional for the ___ Department of Education. Since March 2019, I have been working with P.S.____ , in ___. Since I began working as a substitute paraprofessional, I had to undertake new responsibilities that I haven’t had before. I was now responsible for children with and without special needs, and supporting classroom teachers. I began to work every single day, and have dedicated myself to being the best I could be at my job.

I’d like to proudly say that I am succeeding in doing so now, and I can honestly say that I leave work feeling gratified for doing my job. My job as a paraprofessional is to help children, that are often on the autism spectrum, succeed. A couple months ago, I was unable to help myself. I am so proud of myself for going after the job that I wanted, and continuing to do the best I can at it. I’m ready to go back to school, and I would love to be part of the ____ community

You need to get rid of extra words that add no meaning. You say “I was not a good student at all.” What about just “I wasn’t a good student.”?

Another example: “ I’d like to proudly say…” Why not just “I”m proud of succeeding in my current job…” Just go through and look at wasted words. Then you’ll be able to say what’s important.