Should I Approach this Differently?

College Essays
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<p>Hi, this might sound a little confusing so bear with me.
I'm writing a personal statement for a summer program at BU which allows you to take two college courses before your senior year of HS to sort of get acquainted with college, get used to college studying, and things of that nature. </p>

<p>They would like you to explain why you want to attend the summer program at BU.
This is how I'm approaching it...</p>

<p>I had a very bad grade performance freshman year mainly because of trouble adjusting and mental staleness over the summer.
Im gearing my essay towards how lack of preparation entering 9th grade led me to poor grades, and how I am seeking to attend the BU program in order to better prepare myself for college. I have filled my senior year curriculum with difficult courses, in order to train my mind academically, but there is a gap between now and next year. I hope to turn this summer into an academic challenge so that I don't fall prey to the same error as in 9th grade. </p>

<p>My freshman year grades have badly tarnished my GPA, making me much less appealing to BU, so I hope this can somehow explain the situation.</p>

<p>What do you guys think of this approach? Is it understandable, or will I come off as whiny and irrelevant? Should I just treat it like a normal college essay, and talk about an accomplishment or mind-blowing experience?
I trust the opinions of CC, most people give very useful insight, so any help is greatly appreciated!</p>

<p>Thank you for your time!</p>

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<p>Sounds like a reasonable approach. I would suggest taking it a step further and research any professors and the classes they teach and show how they would engage you.</p>

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<p>Your response explains why you want to attend a summer program.</p>

<p>It doesn’t explain why you want to attend the program at BU, rather than anywhere else.</p>