UMich Supplement, Question One

<p>"Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it." (250ish words)
I would love some advice, first impressions, or feedback (I really just want to know if my essay is on the right track!). PM me if you'd like to read it.
Many thanks!!!</p>