UNC transfer essay advice

<p>I need help with my transfer essay. I've been reading it many times but I still can't figure out how to edit it. Any help would be good. </p>

<p>As I walked into my academic advisor’s office, I never would have guessed that her words would change my perspective. “What I am about to tell you please take seriously.” It was just a routine meeting to go over my grades. I never expected for her to play an important role in a decision that holds life-changing consequences. “Dominique, you have stellar grades, if you can keep them up then I am advising you to reevaluate remaining at the University of North Carolina at Greensboro. As a professional, I am telling you that the University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill greater opportunities that will carry you further. You should contemplate transferring there.” I walked out of her office knowing that I have a life-changing decision to make.
Even though the university I currently attend is a good institution, it is not the best match for me as a Psychology major with a Pre-med track whose goal in life is to become a physician. The University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill has a Psychology department that provides its students with a broad spectrum into the behavioral sciences while focusing on statistical and research tools. Intensified classes that are challenging and will prepare me for the rigorous journey ahead are what I need. I am seeking a university that will provide me with the tools necessary to pursue my desired goal.
I also wish to transfer to a university that is diversified. I am interested in meeting students from all walks of life thus giving me the opportunity to obtain information that I wouldn’t be able to otherwise.
I am looking for a university that has academics that will enable me to impact this world in greater ways than I can imagine. I yearn for the opportunity to learn in an environment that not only teaches in the traditional classroom setting, but goes beyond. I believe the University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill will provide the academia and social aspects I am looking for Overall, the University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill suits me better than my current university. I am a motivated student who is ready to learn, be a part of something bigger than myself and explore all my options. Greater opportunities are present at this institution that I will take full advantage of. I am ready to impact this world in greater ways than I can imagine.</p>

<p>UNC doesn’t have a transfer supplemental essay. Are you using this as the main common app essay and only applying to UNC? You are not supposed to/expected to customize the main essay.</p>