Urgent...Caltech essay? my first one ever

College Essays
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<p>This is my first draft to my caltech essay. The prompt is
In a page, more or less, tell the Admissions Committee how you express your interest, curiosity, or excitement about math, science or engineering. </p>

<p>Whos is willing to read it and give me lots of feedback??</p>

<p>Please no 09-ers. Preferably people in college too. Please prove to me that you're not in high school.
I'm applying early action so i need help FAST! lol</p>

<p>I have less than 2 weeks to finish this up for sure.</p>

<p>THANKS</p>

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<p>anyone willing to critique and help me out??</p>

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<p>.... anyone :( ??
its my first draft i really need help
i dont have much time</p>

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<p>My son is an 09'er and I'm helping him with his essays, but he's not applying to Cal tech....he's decided he isn't into engineering. PM me for my email address, I don't want to post it.</p>