<p>Can anyone correct my college essay?only few hours left!Pls help me,I need your help!!I will really appreciate that!!
Why Brandeis University?(250 words)<br>
I love being at the heart of activity,in a sense that I engage actively in studies and interact with teachers and students enthusiastically.Our class is small. During the class, I always feel free to respond to teachers questions, to propose a different way of thinking or to exchange ideas.My intention is not to impress others, but to interact with teachers and students and to learn from the conversation for the sake of learning. Once in the math class, I found that the math teacher had made a mistake on the board. I pointed it out,but the teacher thought I was wrong. I then explained my answer to him,and he paused for a second and realized that I was right. He appreciated that I had pointed out the mistake. I also lead a study group in which we help each other in studies until the problem is solved. We compete against ourselves,but not others.I love to interact with different people with diverse backgrounds. There are always so many intriguing aspects. It provides me a broader view of the world, not restraining myself in certain circles of people.
At Brandeis, classes are small and faculties are highly accessible. Students integrate in the Brandeis Undergraduate Group Study. Brandeis University is a good match for me. I hope to join the Ballet Club,Brandeis Academic Debate and Speech Society and Knitting Club to explore new and challenging experiences that Brandeis offers.The intimacy, attention, amiable study environment at Brandeis , will provide me with high quality of learning, strengthen my ability and prepare me for the future.</p>
<p>I love being at the heart of activity,in a sense that I engage actively in studies and interact with teachers and students enthusiastically.
Our class is small.During the class, [Instead of saying “during the class” try “in class” ]</p>
<p>I always feel free to respond to teachers questions, to propose a different way of thinking or to exchange ideas.</p>
<p>try: One of the reasons I would choose Brandeis is for the interactive learning environment that comes from small class sizes. One of the things I look for in a college is a learning environment where I am able to closely interact with teachers and students.</p>
<p>Once in the math class, I found that the math teacher had made a mistake on the board. I pointed it out,but the teacher thought I was wrong. I then explained my answer to him,and he paused for a second and realized that I was right. He appreciated that I had pointed out the mistake.</p>
<p>What is the point of the anecdote you just used? You should try making it fit in with what kind of environment/faculty you expect to find at Brandeis </p>
<p>I also lead a study group in which we help each other in studies until the problem is solved. We compete against ourselves,but not others. << this sounds awkward/i don’t understand what you mean</p>
<p>I love to interact with different people with diverse backgrounds. There are always so many intriguing aspects of diversity. (do you come from a diverse neighborhood? if you don’t or are not used to being in one you can also mention that…how you want to be exposed to a diverse environment) It provides me with a broader view of the world, and prevents me from only interacting with groups of people with similar ideas and backgrounds. </p>
<p>At Brandeis, classes are small and faculties are highly accessible. Students integrate in the Brandeis Undergraduate Group Study. Brandeis University is a good match for me. I hope to join the Ballet Club,Brandeis Academic Debate and Speech Society and Knitting Club to explore new and challenging experiences that Brandeis offers.The intimacy, attention, amiable study environment at Brandeis , will provide me with high quality of learning, strengthen my ability << ability for what?, and prepare me for the future.</p>
<p>You can also mention which majors from Brandeis catch your attention. What can you see yourself studying there??</p>