Which of the following is the best revision of sentence 13?

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<p><strong>Although this is positive, despite the presence of the reserve, human population pressure is still severe as over one million people are living there.</strong>***</p>

<p>A) Despite the breeding program's positive effects, it is the population of humans that has put severe pressure on the alligators, with over one million living there.</p>

<p>B) Although the breeding program has had positive effects, the population of humans that has put severe pressure on the alligators, with over one million living there.</p>

<p>C) Despite such positive developments as the breeding program, the human population, which has now reached over one million, has put severe pressure on the alligators.</p>

<p>D) Although such positive developments as the breeding program have occurred, the human population, which now has reached over one million, putting severe pressure on the alligators.</p>

<p>E) Despite the positive developments such as the breeding program, the human population now has reached over one million, putting severe pressure on the alligators.</p>

<p>I chose E, but the answer is C. Apparently, E is illogical. Why is E illogical?</p>

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<p>I would choose C and not E, here is why:</p>

<p>When you say: that something HAS REACHED a certain something, the sentence is completely in the past. It has already happened. But with E, the comma rushes the sentence into the present using the present progressive putting. <– that is the only way I could see it as illogical.</p>

<p>Basically, the jump is illogical, when compared to C which has a nice parallelism as well “HAS NOW REACHED… HAS PUT”</p>

<p>The parallelism is a better explanation, though </p>

<p>Generally: be careful of gerunds.</p>

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<p>Also, with E, the whole “the human population now has reached over one million” part could be a sentence on its own. It’s a bit weird to have a complete sentence within another sentence. Choice C more eloquently gets the point across by mentioning the human population, and then adding that it has now reached one million.</p>