Academic suspension appeal letter feedback?

<p>My name is XXX and I am majoring Psychology at the State University. I am writing this to request appeal my academic dismissal for State University. I was upset on myself when I have received an e-mail that I have been dismissed for summer course 2013. This is my second successive semester of probationary work, I have been dismissed from State University. I would like to reinstate me for fall semester.</p>

<p>After I graduated high school, I attended State University as a non-degree seeking student due to the fact that my SAT and ACT scores were too low to take State classes as degree seeking student. At the first day of college, my plan was to transfer to non-degree seeking to degree seeking. I tried hard to get a good grade and meet the minimum GPA requirements so I could become a full time student. However, I had gotten a terrible GPA meaning could not transfer to degree seeking. The main reason why I had gotten a terrible GPA for the year is I was suffering with depression. I did not want to talk or meet anyone even thought my friends. I felt that I was the only one in the world. Also, I was hard living in a different country without my family five years.</p>

<p>I took Math 147 for summer semester and had really difficult time. I do not want to make any of excuses for my low academic record for summer semester, but I would like to explain the circumstances. I wanted to take summer class for prepare for fall semester and wanted to graduate on time. I thought this class would be easy and thought I would get at less B+ but, I noticed that the class was not that easy at all. I also had problems to concentrate in class. I decided to focus on class and study hard for exams so that way I could get a good grade. I tried hard, attended class every day and I asked professor and math tutors that I could not solve the answers and bought the book to do extra study to improve my grade besides the text book and emailed to professor that I concerned about my grade for the class. I thought these would be enough to reach to a good grade. I think I need to try more and harder than I thought.</p>

<p>If I am allowed to come back to State University this fall, I will take 14 credits to help boost my GPA and completion rate. My goals are to get a 2.5 GPA and I will study as much as possible to be prepared for my homework and exams. Also, I will attend all classes be on time. I realize that I have wasted two years for my life and I do not want to waste my time anymore. I hope you will give me a second opportunity. Thank you very much for this appeal.</p>

<p>Sincerely,</p>

<p>"If I am allowed to come back to State University this fall, I will take 14 credits to help boost my GPA and completion rate. My goals are to get a 2.5 GPA and I will study as much as possible to be prepared for my homework and exams. Also, I will attend all classes be on time. I realize that I have wasted two years for my life and I do not want to waste my time anymore. "</p>

<p>Last week I told myself, “Maria, you will not eat cakes anymore. You will exercise every day. Yes, my goal is to loose 20 lb by Christmas” … </p>

<p>Hopefully, you have more willpower than me.</p>

<p>Sorry, but I would probably not accept your appeal. Your test scores are poor, your grades have been poor, you did badly in a math class despite a serious effort, and almost every sentence in your letter has a grammatical error. Not everyone should try to earn a BA.</p>

<p>While 14 credits might be good to boost your GPA, you would be better off to limit your load to 12 or even part time. If you struggled with the classes you’re already taken, how are you going to improve with an heavier load?</p>

<p>I would not accept your appeal, because it appears you do not belong at the state university yet. Step back, and see what your other options are. You may be better off at a community college, where you can get more assistance with your classes. You also need to address the issues that you feel caused you to fail. If you were suffering from depression, what have you done about it? You also had trouble concentrating - what makes you think you won’t have the same troubles this semester? Take some time off, seek some counseling, and get your life in order. Far better to do that, and then return to school, than waste yet another semester failing a set of classes, and digging a deeper hole. Go to a community college and earn an Associates degree, then you can transfer back the the State University, and probably start with a fresh GPA. Otherwise the previous difficulties will just weigh you down.</p>

<p>There are a lot of grammatical errors in your letter. Please, please, don’t send that without fixing it first. I see that English might not be your first language, so please ask someone who writes well and is a native to fix the letter for you.</p>

<p>I’m not persuaded by excuses myself, so I do not believe that saying that you were depressed is a winning argument. Instead of saying that you were depressed, you must show what is different now that will lead to a different outcome and better grades. I don’t see anything persuasive there. “I’ll try harder” when you have had two semesters is not persuasive. </p>

<p>I think you would do better to ask to do one class at a time, and if you succeed there, to let you come back. But they might say no.</p>

<p>You might just need to work a few years, and then try again.</p>