<p>Ohk, so I had an earlier theard about this and thanks for the responses. I edited it now and this is my final version:</p>
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<p>Special circumstances:</p>
<p>Upon returning from Japan, I enrolled in Interlake High School in Bellevue, Washington for the sole purpose of the IB program. Unfortunately only a month later of my enrollment certain family issues and transportation complications aroused leading to my un-enrollment. In the end, I reenrolled in my former school and sought out the most rigorous classes available through the Bio-Med smaller learning community and later enrolled in Running Start to better prepare myself for college.</p>
<h2> Id also like to explain why my math grades and scores are intolerably low. During the second semester of my sophomore year I went on an exchange to Japan, consequently missing second semester of math. As a result I missed certain math concepts that have disabled me to perform my best. That is why during this past summer I took math classes at the local community college to learn those missed concepts. In conclusion, I may not be the best math student but that has not stopped me from taking challenging courses such as calculus, as I strive to learn and understand the material despite the difficulties I have encountered. </h2>
<p>Is that fine? Not too whiny? Does it make me seem like i'm making excuses for myself? Well anyways, any feedback would be great!!!</p>
<h2>actually forget about the first post…i edited it;</h2>
<p>Upon returning from my exchange to Japan, I enrolled in Interlake High School in Bellevue, Washington for the sole purpose of the IB program. Unfortunately only a month later of my enrollment certain family issues and transportation complications aroused leading to my un-enrollment. In the end, I reenrolled in my former school and sought out the most rigorous classes available through the Bio-Med smaller learning community and later enrolled in Running Start to better prepare myself for college.
Additionally, in regards to my math grades and scores, I would like to point out the reason why they are lacking. During the second semester of my sophomore year I went on an exchange to Japan, consequently missing second semester of math. As a result I missed certain math concepts that have disabled me to perform my best. That is why during this past summer I took math classes at the local community college to learn those missed concepts. In short, I may not be the best math student but that has not stopped me from taking challenging courses such as calculus, as I strive to learn and understand the material despite the difficulties I have encountered. </p>
<h2> Furthermore, during my childhood I was prone to migraines which consequently enough turned into a chronic problem. But it was during my junior year that my migraines reached their peak of throbbing. I was often absent from school due to my medical problems as I was regularly at the doctor’s for treatment. That is why I would like to explain why my grades slid especially during my second semester of my junior year. Yet, in spite of my medical condition I persevered and maintained my grades to my best ability. Thank you for your understanding.</h2>
<p>and yes my migranes are real, i’ve got mri’s and cat scans to prove them. i always go to the children’s hospital for this…but i don’t know if i should even bother includng it in the additional information section because my counsoler has already mentioned in her letter that i had an illness during my jr. year she just never said what the illness was.</p>
<p>Bigweight are you sure? So they won’t admit me due to my chronic migranes?</p>
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<p>Well anyways this is what i planned on putting,</p>
<p>“Furthermore, during my childhood I was prone to migraines that eventually lead to a chronic problem. But, it was during my junior year that my migraines reached their peak, which is where I would like to add a little clarification. I was often absent from school as I was regularly at the doctor’s for treatment. Despite these minor setbacks, I persevered and maintained my grades to my best ability. As I was conscientious in making up my missed assignments and stayed after school when necessary.”</p>
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<p>DOes it sound like i’m whining or just making excuses for myself?
I mean it is true, i’ve got the medical records to prove’
im just scared colleges will think otherwise.?</p>
<p>Sounds to me like a legitimate point to raise (as a former migraine sufferer, I feel your pain, so to speak). It might be good to indicate that you can produce medical records if necessary, although it shouldn’t actually come to that.</p>
<p>One other thing I’d want to know if I were the admissions folks, though, is how are you now? Explanations of past performance issues are ok, but should include some reassurance about your future performance. So, have you been successful in getting treatment or changing your diet so that you don’t get the migraines so often now? Was the problem resolved, or does it still interfere with your academics? Either way, how will you handle this in college?</p>
<p>PS: My earlier comments about your first two paragraphs still stand: Short and sweet, and keep it upbeat.</p>
<h2>i reedited my additional information responses and i was just hoping you could read em’ and provide some feedback?</h2>
<p>Upon returning from my exchange to Japan, I enrolled in Interlake High School in Bellevue, Washington for the sole purpose of the IB program. Unfortunately, only a month later of my enrollment, certain family issues and transportation complications aroused, ensuing my un-enrollment. In the end, I returned to my former school and sought out the most rigorous classes available through the Bio-Med smaller learning community, and later enrolled in Running Start to better prepare myself for college.</p>
<p>Additionally, in regards to my math grades and scores, I would like to elucidate why they are lacking. The second semester of my sophomore year was when I went on an exchange program to Japan, consequently I missed the second semester of my math course. As a result, I was unable to learn the concepts taught which have negatively affected me towards my comprehension of higher-level math. That is why during this past summer I took math classes at the local community college to learn those missed concepts, as well as through independent study. In spite of the difficulties I have encountered, I still strive to take the most challenging courses available to me, as I make every effort to learn and understand the material taught. </p>
<p>Furthermore, during my childhood I was prone to migraines that eventually lead to a chronic problem. But, it was during my junior year that my migraines reached their peak, which is where I would like to add a little clarification. I was often absent from school as I was regularly at the doctor’s for treatment. Despite these minor setbacks, I persevered and maintained my grades to my best ability. As I was conscientious in making up my missed assignments and stayed after school when necessary. Fortunately, the current medication I am taking has lessened my migraines and now I am back on track.</p>
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<p>Are the first two paragraphs still too long and redundant?</p>
<h2>and is my last sentence about my migraines answer your comments about how i am now?</h2>
<p>Getting off topic, but Running Start here in Hawaii is terrible.</p>
<p>I am forced to rid of three classes in place of one college-level course. Grades aren’t sent on a timely basis—in fact, none of mine have been sent yet since the beginning of 2008. Without the schedule conflicts and slow systems, I think the concept is great; the program has allowed me to progress in upper-level calculus courses. But the Hawaii school system simply does not understand many of the basic issues and thus will not address solutions to them.</p>
<p>That’s so interesting! I didn’t know different states participated in Running Start.
As a WA state RS student, I can testify it has been a marvelous program for me personally. It helped me gain maturity, responsibility, and develop leadership skills (I am currently serving as the Supplementary Instruction leader for the General Chemistry series at my comm college).
Too bad the Ivies won’t take the 96 credits I’ve amassed so far!
UW will accept these and promote me to junior status if I matriculate there~
it’s the one factor that’s making me hesitate about attending a more “renowned” school.</p>
<p>OP:
The correct word is “arose” not “aroused”
in this sentence: “certain family issues and transportation complications aroused,”
I hope you can still correct it.</p>