Advice/Opinions?

<p>Hey cc members!</p>

<p>i have finished my personal statement for college applications, but i need some help. My essay right now can be turned in and it wouldn't help or hurt me. I, however, am trying to make it an advantage. (applying to the schools where everybody's stats are identical)</p>

<p>I don't need advice about grammar or rhetorical techniques. I'm looking for opinions about the overall content of my the essay.
I've read my essay so many times that I have lost the ability to judge how interesting it is. When i read it, i feel as if something is missing but can't pinpoint what.
Looking for essay readers (preferably not any high school students)</p>

<p>any help would be greatly appreciated!!</p>