<p>It's not very long -- 345 words, but it should be shorter. I'm not looking for a very intensive critique (which is why I'm asking the internet, and not my parents). Send me a message if you're interested.</p>
<p>It's not very long -- 345 words, but it should be shorter. I'm not looking for a very intensive critique (which is why I'm asking the internet, and not my parents). Send me a message if you're interested.</p>