Anybody want to critique my Transfer Essay!???

<p>Hey guys, I've been holding on to this transfer stuff for almost two months and I still haven't found my way out. I'm so lost, so frustrated, and so annoyed!
I'm applying for Cornell (ILR) and Johns Hopkins- and yes, I haven't even started on my academic interest essays.
I'm still stuck on my common app personal statement.
There's absolutely no one to help me out. I tried asking some ppl at school but they are no help and the tutors refuse to help me unless I'm enrolled in English class (which I'm not).
So, would anybody like to help out this poor soul and read my essay?
Even if you don't correct it, I'd like to at least know how my essay sounds like, though some advice would be greatly appreciated.
By the way, I'd also like to ask not to read my essay if you're applying to Cornell/JHU.
Thanks!</p>

<p>PM it to me</p>

<p>I'll check it out.</p>

<p>PM it to me, I'd like to read it</p>

<p>I'm game as well.</p>

<p>Sure I'll take a look.</p>

<p>If you need any additional readers, I can help. I am completely swamped with midterms but will try to get back to you as soon as possible. Best of luck with Cornell and JHU.</p>

<p>If you still want--I'd love to look at it as well. I've been a University Writing tutor and consultant for 2 years.</p>

<p>cool, ill read it, im also applying to cornell also and i went to transfer day.</p>

<p>sign me up!</p>

<p>I'd like to read it.</p>

<p>I'll read it as well.</p>

<p>pm me..i'll take a look</p>

<p>PM me the essay. =)</p>

<p>Have it send. Last year applied for the ILR school transfer.</p>

<p>you can pm me too</p>

<p>you can pm me as well, i’ll be happy to look @ it</p>

<p>Sure pm me it</p>