Anyone, please critique/proofread my personal statement?

College Essays
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<p>500 word essay. Prompt: "anything"</p>

<p>I am in desperate need of constructive feedback.... can't really tell if my point comes across well in this essay</p>

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<p>PM it to me :)</p>

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<p>I sent it to you lolcats4</p>

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<p>Hey,</p>

<p>I'd gladly read it if you read mine and give some thoughts.</p>

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<p>Ill take a look at it</p>

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<p>i can have a look at it if you want</p>

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<p>Ill give it a go. lmao</p>