Anyone wanna critique my rough draft Columbia essay?

College Essays
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<p>I'd prefer if you weren't also applying to Columbia. </p>

<p>Also, it's a very rough draft so at the start I'll just list some things about it that I'm concerned with. It's a very offbeat approach to a self-portrait I think. Let me know and I'll PM you.</p>

<p>I'd appreciate if you could respond quickly. I'll critique your essays to if you want.</p>

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<p>Bump! 10char</p>

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<p>PM it to me, i’m not applying to Columbia. i’m trying to help as many people as possible.</p>

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<p>Okay, I just saw this. PM’ing you now</p>

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<p>PM it over if you like :)</p>